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Merl
02-05-2002, 04:23 PM
You haunt me
Drive me crazy
Take my breathe away

Its never complete
Nothing ever is
Til I talk to you

I don’t know what it is
No idea how you do it
You get to me like no one else does

I close my eyes
Your all I see
Being away drives me in sane

The stars in the sky
Shine like your eyes
And tears me a part inside

I’ve fallen for you
And Tears roll on by
Few things can feel like this

Theres nothing in the world
That doesn’t remind me of you
Its all I really have

A gentle breeze reminds me
Of your sweet innoscence
And I can’t understand

What could make you care for me
I’m not even sure
You will the way I do

All I know is
You make it alright
And I want nothing more

Then to be
In your arms
Tonight


Drea
02-05-2002, 10:13 PM
I like it Deus…

I can relate…

damn… that’s a deep poem…

what inspired you? (If I may inquire….)


Jamie
02-06-2002, 01:39 AM
Nice Deus. Hehe me and you are almost the same when it comes to love. ^^

Rabid Monkey
02-07-2002, 12:48 AM
Originally posted by Deus Immortale
The stars in the sky
Shine like your eyes
And tears me a part inside

That is a very powerful stanza. I think you should try to write more like this one or try to not make one like this in a poem that you aren’t really using rhymes with. It stands out too much and takes away from the rest of the poem if you do. Otherwise it was a very good poem, keep it up!


Merl
02-07-2002, 03:43 PM
It is better to be remembered for eternity for a single stanza then to be given a lifetime for a mediocre poem.

I prefer to have stanzas stand out, aside from that, I just happened to write that not long before it was posted, so time to re-work it had not been achieved.

and tif, my inspiration. . .. lol, being loveless I guess


Drea
02-07-2002, 05:04 PM
Loveless huh Deus?

What female wouldn’t swoon @ having someone write such a beautiful poem about them?

(I know I would….)

What could make you care for me
I’m not even sure
You will the way I do

All I know is
You make it alright
And I want nothing more

Then to be
In your arms
Tonight

… I love those stanzas… *sniffle* so damn prettie deus….. 🙂


Merl
02-07-2002, 06:24 PM
i take it you havn’t seen my pic in the album?

Drea
02-07-2002, 07:28 PM
What album? Huh? No… I don’t think so..

*is confuddled*


chihuadog
02-09-2002, 09:26 AM
That’s a pretty poem. There are a few grammatical errors at the beginning, but they aren’t bad enough to ruin the poem. Most of the poems dealing with love are cliche, but this one is definitely not. It’s rather different from all the poems I’ve ever read.

Allen Schezar
02-19-2002, 11:09 PM
I like how the the poem starts.

SSJ
02-19-2002, 11:20 PM
A great poem deus. Well done and quite interesting. Keep em commin.:)

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