Ice!~Neko~~Poetry

Here�s a poem I wrote the other day. The meaning is kind of ambiguous; it�s basically trying to show someone who confused about being who they are, and is fighting between themself and what other people want the person to be.

I�m going to use this thread to show any other poems I write.

Lost Again

Its dark, the air is still,
Yet flows around me.
Never moving, always changing,
Just another choice,
Another step.
I hear a voice
It speaks in a tongue so clear.
I don�t understand the words.
My mind is clear
Never numb
I never move
I always fear
Another step.

My mind is numb.

I try to hard
To be too different,
I try to hard
To rise and live when,
People try me
Use and lie,
Deceit,
I wonder why?
Should I live, or should I die?
What else to do, when no one hears your cry?

Should I live, or should I die?

Nice poem, and one I can relate to especially at times when I have felt lost before. It’s easy to read and flows well. Good work. Keep it up. 🙂

Nice poem. Overused subject, but nice flow.

Not bad at all. I kinda write Poetry but it’s not that good. But you can write and you should keep on writing.

I felt depressed when i woke up this morning, and this rhyme was floating around in my head.

You’re the tears on my pillow,
You�re the reason I�m see-through
Why I�m not on this level.
You took my heart
And turned it jellow.
Crushed me like a bug,
� Tears on my Pillow.

not bad overall. In the first one work on the line breaks to try to get it more even. That doesn’t really matter much if your writing verbal poetry but it helps with this written presentation.

Keep writing and express whatever you feel like on any topic even if it is considered overused. Ezra Pound said that we could never make new stories since all the plots were used. We now must try to make those used streams of thought better. good job.