Holy Knight of Gaia

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The earth was at peace since the end of the War....Monsters had fled from the great force that the Tower of Alexander in the capital of Redhorn brings to the world
But it was soon bout to end......For an evil plot had yust been set against the free people af Gaia

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All was calm in Roghorn, capital city of the Human realm of Redhorn.... as most of the people were resting from their activities of rebuilding the city because of
the damage the war had done to them.......

Roghorn was one of the biggest cities in the free world of Gaia...With in it the newly built castle with upon it The Tower of Alexander....
All was sleeping...There were no sounds except for the horse soldiers wich patrol the outern road of the city

But there was one human moving around.....it was a small person..with a cloak so he would not reveal his identidy...He moved through the shadows making no sound at all
heading for the castle....
As he reached the closed gates of the Tower of Alexander he looks around checking if no guards are around and then he wispers......"Excellent"

He puts his hand against the wall....making it shine for a moment...an then...He steps right through
Now within the tower walls he throws of his cloak....
He had dark long hair and looked like sephiroth in a weird way....h headed for the round staircase wich leads to the Crystal of Alexander....and when he reaches the stairs
he starts to jump from floor to floor skipping 5 floors every jump...Until he reaches the Crystal floor

2 guards stand here...and notice the figure...they are noticably shocked...."how did you get in here" a guard asks as he puts his lance towards the figure..
The figure turns his head toward the 2 figures still crouched from the last jump then he slowly sais "The time has come to put this world into darkness once more"

The guards now move towards the figure wich is still not standing up...."Surrender yourself" one of the guards yells
"you cannot stop me" And then the dark figure leaps into the sky....Pulling out a gigantic blade and bounces gainst the wall..heading for the guards their back...
They did not notice a thing....The dark figure was already at ease when they touched the floor without their heads...blood dripping slowly to the bottom of the tower

He moves into the crystal chamber...Astonished by the beauty of the Crystal of Alexander...."I cannot let myself be misguided by the power of this crystal. It can no longer
Exist if we are to make a move" the dark figure said to himself putting a glowing painting on the floor next to the crystal altar
from the moment he was done he jumped down to the bottom of the tower, Landing in blood of the guards dripping above

"The moment has come ......To unleash the power of Bahamuth once again" the figure sais as he starts doing some Headonist moves....forming fire in his hands
a moment later he warps a fireball into the sky...Forming a fire form of a Dragon in the clouds......then it comes alive and a great Dragon comes out of the Sky
landing on the tower.....

The dark figure looks up yelling at the dragon "Lord Bahamuth, The time has come to reclaim this world, and put it into darkness once again, Destroy the tower of Alexander
so that you can rule over his terrain and make chaos reign the lands once again" The dragon did not reply....but after a while it flew over the city

Awaking the guards standing in astonishment on the walls.....
Guards started shooting arrows at the dragon noticin they urn up nearing the dragon.....As Bahamuth returns from another turn around the tower he flares the Guard with one solid breath
leaving an inferno on the outer walls

Then he heads to the inner city and masses a Fireball to his beak...Surging in infernous heat from every direction...and gathering it in front of him
Then he rages through the fire in front of him...Turning him into a Fire form of a Dragon.....Hitting the tower of Alexander in the middle
then he dissapears leaving the tower ready to collaps

Quietness returns to the city.......with the only remarkable thing the burning walls
The tower starts to lean over and starts crashing into the left side of the city...Making explosions appear on some places....and ultimately
killing 100rds of people

looking upon this was the King of Redhorn....who slowly bowed his head saying "It has returned"
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Sequel will come

It's a great opening chapter proud cloud ! Full of action and an exciting read, I hope you'll be posting the next bit soon.

Just a couple of things, using multiple full stops is a recognised punctuation mark but only three, that is '...' rather than more of less, sorry I probably make no sense ! XD! Also, maybe you could swop some of the '...' for commas because using '...' occasionally adds great effect but overuse and it loses the effect.

Hope you post more soon ! :)

owkay I'll keep that in mind.......for the sequel....It's finished but i'm going to check for those ..........thingies i always do wrong.

It will be on this afternoon

also check the add-on pic....
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Holy Knight of Gaia

The tower of Alexander was downed...Leaving a big part of the city in rubble....A knight stood looking at all this.....bowing his head as tears fell down from his eyes....He had lost everything here
his home, his family, his love, and he swore to have revenge

Part 2: The chaos returns
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It was late in the evening,the Proud family lived in the green hills of Troya, not having any troubles on their minds...
it was a family wich mostly consisted of war heroes: the Grandfather had fought bravely in the first battle for Troyes and the father had fought in the Battle for Dun-Kazak wich ended the war 40 days ago

They were all sitting near the fire outside the house, drinking cups of hot coffee, well all but one was sitting at the house. The son of the family was out in the lower hills training with a wooden sword he got from his grandpa. he was quite good at it as he could stop his grandpa in a duel. but yeah, his granpa was quite old too
after a while of slashing against a tree he sat down on a rock tired because of the movements he had been doing and... he was kindoff satisfied with his skills. He sighed slowly to get a comfortable feeling.
He then lay down on the rock looking up at the stars above.

5 minutes later he was still lying on the rock....he thought to himself "I wish this moment could last forever"....he slowly sighed again..
He looks at the moon.....a bright glow comes from it lighting the surrounding area, and suddenly... a black shape obsures his sight on the moon for a brief moment.

"Huh?!" Proudcloud exclaimed as he sat up, still looking at the sky "I could've sworn something yust flew over me" he said to himself
Clouds started gathering around the mountains and concealed the sky.....
Proudcloud knew that something was wrong, a minute later he got his confirmation

A womanly scream came from somewhat higher in the hills. He turned around and quickly went towards the cabin "You fool....you should've gone up ther much sooner. You knew something was wrong" he said in his thoughts...Now running quickly through a small forest, some branches hit him in the face making little cuts here and there
Then he reached the cabin....It was burning . He looked around seeing that his father was still fighting...But the rest of the family lay dead...He yelled "FATHER"..
His fathers head turned towards him...."run boy.....get to troyes" he yelled. Then a Scorpio came from the other side of the Cabin and stinged his father..Making his body collapse to the ground....

Eyes now turned to him and he got this inner conflict wether to run or not . The monsters came closer and Proudcloud decided...."I am no runner, i must defeat these." now confidence came to his eyes and he sprinted to where his father had fallen

The scorpio and Tigerfangs came towards him trying to hit him he dodged the Tiger bites managing to get through with only mild cuts on his legs and arms.
He was almost there as he saw the giant Scorpio right in front....
He quickly considered what to do, sweat running from his forehead because of the tension of the moment,He nodded to himself, haviong gotten an idea, and then he leaped...It was the highest leap he ever made. He'd seen his dad do it but had never been able to do it himself. he bounced against the still standing wall of the cabin collapsing it on a Bomb(monster) and then leaping yust in time...and so he reached his fathers sword

He picked it up....feeling a sensation going through him, a sensation that told him to use the sword and gave him the strength to wield it....
He quickly put the sword in battle stance as he sees the Scorpio near him
He leaps once more dodging the tail wich passed by verry close to his cheek and finally planting the sword in the scorpio

it falls to the ground....and Proudcloud starts hitting away against the TigerFangs. After a while all monsters were dead..He started realising what had happened...
He went back to the corpses and fell to his knees, he bowed his head over the dead body of his father and mother and started crying....."This will not go unpunished" he swore, looking up towards the morning sun wich was rising after the hills

He then took his fathers Holy Sword, swung it to his shoulder, and headed down the hills. towards the green valley of the river Trone and the village of Troyes.

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this is part2, next part will come soon