This is my first comic. My english maybe is not soo god but i was trying translate from my language. If you will see some errors write where (XP) i'll correct it.
About story... I'll be wery happy if it will apeal you.
This is only first part. I work upon next. Please coment!

Wow thats really interesting.
I likes it.

It's quite deep. I like it.

Hmmm, didn't really understand that. Probably cause I don't know which way it reads. So, left to right or right to left?

Shinryudan - left to right.
This isnt full japan/manga. (I'm not come from Japan! Exactly from Poland:P) Its my inwention and you always should read it from left to right. Exactly from overhead left corner for bottom right corner, after slant. XD

The art is really really good, though the translation is pretty poor D: I'd love to help you translate it so it makes more sense, but I'm not too sure what you were even trying to say at points.

Yeah, gotta agree. The drawings are very nice :) But the translation is somewhat hard to understand although I think I understand the gist of it.

Pretty good overall, but the dialog sounded somewhat nebulous to me. People may experience trouble with this.

Excellent. Drawings.

:D wow

And the texts may be a bit vague, but its suits the whole athmosphere quite well, nonetheless.

Not sure I like the art style (people with huge eyes and no noses are hard for me to take seriously), but you seem to have the sequiential art down pretty good. :3 I always found panels hard to do.

This comic is awesome!

Its something like little bonus:

Its cool and everything, but theres definetly room for improvement. keep up the good work

(http://img303.imageshack.us/my.php?image=treeehz8.jpg)
This is TreEe (dont call her tree!;P)

I really like your drawings~

OK
Next: Envy
(http://img165.imageshack.us/my.php?image=envydq4.jpg)

hehe, the thing I like about this is that everything is black/white/gray except for the eyes. Probably the only thing that REALLY jumps out at me. ^^

AxSs its not a name! Its from my name Alexsandra.
(http://img471.imageshack.us/my.php?image=asxflc2.jpg)

(http://img119.imageshack.us/my.php?image=smokwr6zd4.jpg)
Its my dragon Lightning.

Edit: And my new picture: Fanyy Before
(http://img90.imageshack.us/my.php?image=58812555rv3.jpg)

Nobody comment my previous work...
Anyway... its my last 'picture':
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/55688507/?qo=1&q=by%3Aquiss&qh=sort%3Atime+-in%3Ascraps
Enjoy ;P (and please comment XP)

Oh your art is beautiful. ^^ I wish I could draw manga-style that well.

Thanks, but I should practise more and more, because, for me, most of my drawings suck;P

You have a clean style and show a lot of potential.

The only advice I would give you at this point would be to study the human anatomy more. Your character almost seem as though they have no muscles whatsoever. They lack proper shapes in most of their members (especially their legs), and they are out of proportions (way too long if you ask me).

Get a drawing book that focuses on human anatomy and try to recreate the pics as many times as you can. In no time, you'll be able to draw each parts in any positions with ease.

up 2 down or left to right?

Whoooo���...the panels are weird, it's way hard to follow. It's actually a straight-up mess which needs total reworking on.

Though I did try to make out what was happening storywise, and it's okay I guess. Art as well is all right, you've got potential but you could really work on proportions and anatomy more. :/ This (wo)man speaks great words of wisdom:


The only advice I would give you at this point would be to study the human anatomy more. Your character almost seem as though they have no muscles whatsoever. They lack proper shapes in most of their members (especially their legs), and they are out of proportions (way too long if you ask me).

Get a drawing book that focuses on human anatomy and try to recreate the pics as many times as you can. In no time, you'll be able to draw each parts in any positions with ease.

^Listen to that fella.

Call me a man please.

Hynad is my first name reversed (with an added an "H" for eastetic). ^_-

Thanks you all for tips and coment...
This is first of my depresion art
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/58414158/

Thanks you all for tips and coments...
This is first of my depresion art
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/58414158/

Pretty! but i dont get it.

Pretty! but i dont get it.

What you don't get? It's my oc Fanyy. She's sitting on big dead bug:D



Edit:
My new work. All ladies from my comic
http://quiss.deviantart.com/art/New-Avatar-Formation-63750352

Hi there! Sorry for double posting.
My new character for my comic Iluane
(http://img265.imageshack.us/my.php?image=enve2cd1.jpg)
I changed my style of drawings.
And I'm working on new pages of my comic^^ Hope, human anatomy, on this picture is better than before;P

I really like your style of drawing. Comic looks interesting as well. Anatomy is a bitch in comics though.

hello!

Sweet drawings.


hello!

Um, what the hell?

the drawings are really nice. ^.^

TreEe (Katia)

Next characters from my comic.
From left: Enve (Odette), Dragomir (Rimogard), Amaro (?) & Zack (?)

Reply after a yearXD



















Did I improved past this year? ^^

(For more of my characters from manga and other pics please go here: quiss.deviantart.com)

I keep misreading the thread as "My Fanny Lightning".

Nevertheless, I like this stuff :)

Well if U're thinking about Lightning from FFXIII reading this title then I have one pic of Lightning (and Serah) in my gallery too^^

^ Lots of proportion problems in this latest pic...

You're doing one heck of a job for the coloring though.