somebody rate this out of ten...


eternal.

life into me flow and breathe,
rest your head on my lap,
and cry,
cry for the children,
the homeless and poor,
cry for the people,
remembered no more,
trust in eternity,
put your faith in me,
your sword in my hand,
i'll fight for the troubled in this eternal land.
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i just did this to see if anyone likes my poetry. please rate it.

Prak, Where you at?
Come here, show me what you think,
Of this whack piece-O-crap,
jus playin'

very col...

I like poetry, yes. But this is just an insult to all poets.

This is just a very wierd poem...

i thought it was fucking brilliant. know show some respect

bitches

i thought it was fucking brilliant. know show some respect

bitches

That realy isn't nice. People have their own tastes, and you shouldn't mouth them off for voicing how they feel on a poem. You could say you thought the poem was good ect. but calling people bitches is just mean...

Right, the first sentance of the poem makes no senes or what so ever, there is no flow, there's no central thought behind it.

There's one good thing about it, so far I can't see spelling errors.

And I show respect where it belongs, this is just a poor poem.

Why is YOUR sword in my hand? Where is MY sword?

i thought it was fucking brilliant. know show some respect

bitches
Are you the bastard who voted ten?

do you want a fight!

Yeah, because empty threats made over the internet aren't pathetic.

do YOU want a fight

Blank - shut up

People - stop annoying him.

np~

im sorry