crafted by the gods,
without you i would know only emptiness,
i want you to stay in my arms,
i love you… masamune.
don’t use ze internet
i almost pissed myself when i read this line
thank you, exactly. its a joke, i dont thnk you guys got it though. :confused:
THERE ONCE WAS A DUDE NAMED SEPH
WHO’S THE ONE AND ONLY, THE BEST
HE STOOD ON A CHAIR, THEN JUMPED OUT THE AIR
AND STABBED LITTLE AERIS TO DEATH!
i cant take credit for this though, it was posted by a guy named seiferoth from the realm of fantasy site.
that’s really cold
Some people are, well, shit. It’s not our fault.
why was it shit?
Should he have used some different words?
Maybe written more lines?
If you dont say what he could change to make it better then he wont know will he.
I think its sweet. Nice work.
If it says what the writer wanted then it is good.
If it says what the writer wanted then it is good.
That’s where you’re wrong. I’m not going to explain. Because I can’t be bothered.
Oh really? Can you tell me what free verse is? Or blank verse? And are you telling me that isnt poetry?
And where did you get that garbage definition of poetry?!
Go to dictionary.com and find it ffs.
You and Shadow don’t know what you are talking about.
And where did you get that garbage definition of poetry?!
Go to dictionary.com and find it ffs.
You and Shadow don’t know what you are talking about.
I don’t think you know what you’re even talking about yourself
Roses are Red
Voliets are Blue
You are a ass hole
So poo poo on you.
2. i have no idea who masamune is.
3. nobody can define poetry.
4. also dragoncurry, the second one did rhyme, cant you read?
besides that 2nd one aint mine so calm down poetry hater.
6. why do most forum-posters insult people they dont know and then hide
behind their monitors.
7. i dont understand why there is no rationality here either.
if you dont like the poem explain why with more words than gay and stupid.
8. and yes i am aware that nobody said gay and stupid.
9. here is another original…
what made her go,
what made her fulfill her destiny,
what about my destiny,
what about aeris?
Roses are Red
Voliets are Blue
You are a ass hole
So poo poo on you.
She just dissed you in peom form, ed. nuclear burn.
Roses are Red
Voliets are Blue
You are a ass hole
So poo poo on you.
You just dissed MMM, you’re gonna get your ass ripped apart. Trust me, I’d know.
you know that poem as been up for days and he hasnt done anything. It was a joke and I guess he is man enough to take it without getting all worked up over it.
In my opinion, the poem took little effort, which if the poster is to be believed, was the point. Poetry should not be used as a joke in itself, because people will never read it that way. It was read the way it should be read; and in this case, the poet was talking about a sword, an instrument of death, as though it were a woman.
The poem itself was also short, with no real depth, and ended abruptly with a ‘surpise’ that made the reader groan instead of laugh. So i’m afraid it not only failed as poetry, but as humour as well =/
Au contraire, here I am.
Shadow Wolf’s basically right, it was a joke.
now on a different note ill be leaving this site now, due to reasons concerning other sites and nothing to do with this thread so to anyone who enjoyed the poem ”im glad you liked it” and to anyone who didnt like it ”it was a joke!!!” i decided to post my leaving here as this is where im most active and that isnt much activity i have to say. so i will say goodbye to all of you. see ya.