Whatever man.

That is some of the best writing in this whole site. It's very good. I think 90% of whoever posts here after me will agree. Bravo man.

That is some of the best writing in this whole site. It's very good. I think 90% of whoever posts here after me will agree. Bravo man.Nope.

Sorry, no dice, and thanks for the spam.


My anger is no more
I regain control over myself
Nah, she ain�t acting like a whore

Acpo and I could've come up with that. As a joke. Not a serious poem.

It's like you're searching for a rhyme. It's not from within. Do I have to write this every time to get it into your heads?


It just comes out as �er..�
I�m so into her
Oh god.


My god she�s so beautiful
She takes away my breath
When I�m around her
I no longer seek my death
I seek death because I read this poem.

I cry. I CRY.

Reading this makes me want to gag.

Well, I guess I know how you feel. But hey, can't a guy post some of his own shit? I know it sucks, but it's how I feel. I don't care if you don't respect that - very few actually respects me. And mrmonkeyman - I do hope you find death.

Anyway, she likes it

Christ on a bike.

And mrmonkeyman - I do hope you find death.

then what's he gonna do? kick him in the balls...

oh yeah and that song is shit i read it thinking... bugger, some sort of diseased animal had spread their rabies infected faeces all over my monitor.... also if you think some sort of constructive criticism is on it's way.... you're wrong, this post is finished.... now

rofl

charlmagne's laugh is sweeter than
the trail'd echo of belles ringing
when charlmagne laughs,
im overriden with joy.

-sk, i like birds

Yeah i have to agree sorry man but it does suck ass but il give you some credit because you wrote it yourself i couldnt write a song that good...hence the fact i dont!

Well, I guess I know how you feel. But hey, can't a guy post some of his own shit? I know it sucks, but it's how I feel. I don't care if you don't respect that - very few actually respects me. And mrmonkeyman - I do hope you find death.
Very few respect you because you're stupid. I hope the stupid slut who actually fell for this awful crap gives you herpes.

I dont know how many times this needs to be said, but you post your works on this site to get critiqued. It might not be so nice, but stop being a pussy ;\ Its actually helpful, and it'll help you be a better writer. the fact you get pissed off about it shows you don't care about your writing, and soon your girlfriend will recognize that you KNOWINGLY gave her a piece of crap and dump your sorry ass.

Actually, I bet she didn't really like it. If I got something like that I'd be totally creeped out, and to avoid getting stalked and even more obsessed over, I"d just tell the guy I liked it, so he'd leave me alone. TAKE THAT HOW YOU WILL

I dont know how many times this needs to be said, but you post your works on this site to get critiqued. It might not be so nice, but stop being a pussy ;\ Its actually helpful, and it'll help you be a better writer. the fact you get pissed off about it shows you don't care about your *writting*, and soon your girlfriend will recognize that you KNOWINGLY gave her a piece of crap and dump your sorry ass.

You make a point, but still where is the constructive criticism?

Saying this poem sucks or blatantly just calling a piece of shit is just the opposite of those who say a poem is great without any reason behind it. There has been nothing said at all that will help him become a better writer.

I guess you don't care about your "writting" either, weave together some spelling.

Hey, how about you piss off? Its called a typo. My last paragraph was a joke mostly, and I thought I was pretty nice about things. Maybe MMM is being a bit of a dick about stuff, but what I can't understand why people take it so seriously, and to heart so much.

You're probably just bitter because he insulted your work too. Cry me a river, build me a bridge, and get over it.

Mainly because people are writing about things going on in there life. MMM has given me "constructive critcism" many times, I'm not bitter about it. But I think he goes a bit too far, I don't see how telling someone to never write again or quit is helping them.


Cry me a river, build me a bridge, and get over it.
Okay...

Cry me a river
Build me a bridge
Get over it
I'll be waiting on the otherside

The meaning of river
To represent the tears
The reason why you shiver
The reason for your fears

The meaning of the bridge
To represent the way
Nothing rhymes with bridge
So walk towards a better a day

I'll cross over and leave the old days behind
I'll be waiting on the other end
Let the currents pass and the memories in time
I'll be there my friend

I'll get over it...
We'll cross that bridge together

I guess you don't care about your "writting" either, weave together some spelling.
OWNED

O MAN THAT WAS A NUCLEAR BURN0
Kyouto, you're nothing special. The only reason I don't give you the same level of shit as everyone else is because you actually seem to put a moment's thought into what you write.

These people come here to have their works needlessly praised for their mediocrity. I refuse to do so, so I approach it from a different - in fact, the opposite - angle. I'll be sure to just not bother with you in the future. You've had spelling and grammar faults in your writing, and I'll be sure to now highlight them, possibly with a larger font than usual.

Prick.

Kyouto, you're nothing special. The only reason I don't give you the same level of shit as everyone else is because you actually seem to put a moment's thought into what you write.

I appreciate that.


These people come here to have their works needlessly praised for their mediocrity. I refuse to do so, so I approach it from a different - in fact, the opposite - angle. I'll be sure to just not bother with you in the future. You've had spelling and grammar faults in your writing, and I'll be sure to now highlight them, possibly with a larger font than usual.

Be my guest, use color if you find it necessary. I'm trying to improve as much as I can.

Jeez. Last time I post any of my shit here. Wait... wouldn't that just please you? Anyway, I did post it here to get some critique. Not for you assholes to just insult me and eachother. I can take critique - but I don't like being dissed. So fuck the fuck off, fuckers.

Would appreciate if this thread was closed.

So fuck the fuck off, fuckers.
Um...no comment. :-(

Nobody said our criticism must be constructive, and hell, being an ass is MUCH more fun. <3

sk, sk
you're sort of a man
but you don't like
tits
or cocks
what's up with that
poem
poem.

duo, duo, my lovely duo,
will you ever remain true?
in face of these waves of tension,
no one can suppress the passion
that I have for you! ;)

o poem
i love you
poem


word.

also, I'm afraid your song was fairly horrible. It needs to actually sound unridiculous.

repeating: please close this fucking thread right fucking now. I've taken away the song, so the thread has no point in keeping alive. Oh, and crystal sword - thanks for the support.^_^