Just a small poem i wrote for part of my art exam, i'm trying to describe The Catacombs.

The Catacombs

Underground there lays a secret,
Buried deep; the catacombs,
Misty stones do lace the walls,
A solemn place where angels roam.

Um..that was a descent start, but nothing spectacular. No offense or anything:

"there lays a secret". It should be lay, not lays. And "misty stones lace the walls". I think most people know that the catacombs walls are made of stone or something along that nature. And why would angels roam underground? I'm not trying to be mean but I have a talent in poetry and I notice little stuff like this. This is a good start, keep it up.

Originally posted by Tiduslives
um..that was a descent start but nothing spectacular. no offense or anything. "there lays a secret" it should be lay not lays.

Actually, if you want to get really technical, it should be "there lies a secret".

Either would work.