Lightning Mage
03-22-2004, 11:03 PM
Hi.
This is a preveiw for a story based on Star Wars i'm working on. It'll be in story format and not script.
I want to know what you guys think of the preview before I decide to get started.
Well, enjoy this "Trailer" if you will.
Star Wars: The Wandering Force
Book One: The Planet of Omnipotence
A Force using bounty hunter...
A man on no side of the law...
A bounty placed...
A secret discovered...
An unstoppable adversary...
A young ex-apprentice named Jak Zaden has been pondering about his path in the force. He ran away from Luke Skywalker's academy in the dead of night to figure out the true path he should take. Armed with a silver-bladed lightsaber, he has became a bounty hunter to gain his credits. One day he is employed by an anonymous group to capture a man named Neka Das. He is sucsesful, but his captive reveals the reason he is being hunted. Das tells Zaden about a planet that has never shown up on any scanner or radar. Das says the creatures that inhabit the planet knew he was there. Zaden must now figure out the mysteries of this planet Das speaks of. However, because of his delayed delivery of Das, a bounty has been placed on his own head. Now he must find the planet and evade numerous attempts at being blown to space dust by an almost immortal bounty hunter. Can Jak Zaden reach the location of the planet before they both die trying? Zaden's adventure begins here...
Yeah, it's a little thingie. I want to know opinions on this before I write it, just to know if I shouldn't bother. If you wish to find out more, tell me to write it. More will be explained then.
This is a preveiw for a story based on Star Wars i'm working on. It'll be in story format and not script.
I want to know what you guys think of the preview before I decide to get started.
Well, enjoy this "Trailer" if you will.
Star Wars: The Wandering Force
Book One: The Planet of Omnipotence
A Force using bounty hunter...
A man on no side of the law...
A bounty placed...
A secret discovered...
An unstoppable adversary...
A young ex-apprentice named Jak Zaden has been pondering about his path in the force. He ran away from Luke Skywalker's academy in the dead of night to figure out the true path he should take. Armed with a silver-bladed lightsaber, he has became a bounty hunter to gain his credits. One day he is employed by an anonymous group to capture a man named Neka Das. He is sucsesful, but his captive reveals the reason he is being hunted. Das tells Zaden about a planet that has never shown up on any scanner or radar. Das says the creatures that inhabit the planet knew he was there. Zaden must now figure out the mysteries of this planet Das speaks of. However, because of his delayed delivery of Das, a bounty has been placed on his own head. Now he must find the planet and evade numerous attempts at being blown to space dust by an almost immortal bounty hunter. Can Jak Zaden reach the location of the planet before they both die trying? Zaden's adventure begins here...
Yeah, it's a little thingie. I want to know opinions on this before I write it, just to know if I shouldn't bother. If you wish to find out more, tell me to write it. More will be explained then.