Questional Possibilities

Bus Driver

01-21-2007, 04:17 AM

A sound an echo…
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!

Pimp Daddy McSnake

01-22-2007, 02:40 AM

This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word ‘bullshit’ with ‘hamsters’.

Touchstone

01-26-2007, 12:00 AM

A sound an echo…
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!

Go Alcoholics go!!

Meph

01-26-2007, 08:52 PM

Jarosik

02-07-2007, 04:49 PM

I love it. Best poem ever.

02-15-2007, 08:18 AM

This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word ‘bullshit’ with ‘hamsters’.

Agreed.

Repeating a line is only effective if it’s a really good line. "No just bullshit" is just kind of… everyday talk. Doesn’t really feel like you’re conveying much.