Inquisitor: The Daemon of Xzhang Khar

Camera pans to a small freighter ship, slowly moving through space. The camera zooms in, through a small observation deck and into a secluded room. A middle-aged man sits at the table there, writing into a parchment.

TIBERIAN VO (Camera flicks through various slides): It was the dawn of the 41st Millennia, the Imperium was ruling the galaxy through dictatorship. Those foolish enough became Inquisitors, pawns of the Imperium, used to destroy �Chaos�, a strange and powerful alien force. These Inquisitors were the most powerful beings in the Universe, Tyrus; the Witch Hunter� Eisenhorn; the Holy Man� Tiberian C Vestas� Yes, I became an Inquisitor, I was lured by the visions of fame and glory, this reward was reserved however for the Desperados; Slick Devlan and his crew or renegades. We, got nothing but horror. The Chaos were clever, I owe them that much. They would lure Inquisitors to their planet, the Inquisitors would see happiness and joy, then side with the Chaos. Then, came my time to shine� An ancient Daemon was imprisoned in a stone prison millennia�s ago, the key to the stone prison was a sword, once wielded by the Sisterhood�

Camera Flickers And When It Focuses, A Man Stands On An Observation Deck.

EISENHORN: Luscious! There it is; Xzhang Khar. Disengage warp speed, prepare for a landing!

LUSCIOUS �SLICK� DEVLAN: YESSIR! I�ll bring her down right away!

EISENHORN: Excellent, in no time, the Sword of the Sisterhood will be mine!

DEVLAN: Why exactly do you seek this artefact Sir? Is it not keeping the ancient Daemon Sadious 745782 in it�s prison?

EISENHORN: Mere myth to ward off those like us. Didn�t I tell you to land this thing!?

DEVLAN: Right away sir!

Camera zooms out of the ship as it lands onto the rocky planet, it soon flicks to another ship.

TIBERIAN: What the hell is going on!? Sir, we�ve got an unregged ship landing on Xzhang Khar. Do I have permission to pursue? It could be a group of Chaos�

MISSION COMMAND: It isn�t Chaos Tiberian, but you have permission to pursue. Just be careful there, remember Sadious�

TIBERIAN: I am aware of the Daemon spirit�

TIBERIAN flicks a complex line of switches and his ship enters a worm hole�

This is a very intriguing script thus far. However, I’m not familiar with all the termonology you used, and while the intro was very helpful, perhaps you could go a little more in depth? I’m sure the images that flash across the screen will help a lot too. I enjoyed what I’ve read and am looking forward to what comes next.