A poem by me

i wrote this poem for someone i know, its nameless:

I�m sorry,
Sorry I couldn�t be there for you, when you needed it most.
I�m sorry for all the suffering you went through.
I�m sorry for not understanding.
If only I knew sooner, I could have helped.
Brought you out of this darkness.

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In this dismal world we live in,
A place so black and cold,
I see a girl, so beautiful,
Her heart as good as gold.
Standing there, but no one cares�
Lost in this empty place.
Her glowing body, her gentle lips,
Her sweet, and innocent face.
But beneath her fa�ade, a young girl cries,
And drops a gentle tear.
Shouting out, into the world,
But sadly no one hears.

And I do pray, that one day,
The world will find a way,
To open up,
And see that life,
Is just another way.

The first one is okay. It’s good, but it’s only mediocre good. The second one is way better, imo. I think it sounds better, and I like the choice of words. Well done.

its all one poem… i wrote it for somone so its hard to understand why they are connected =\

Those are good. Good poetry, well done, nice words.

not bad neko. Two very enthusiastic thumbs up, fine holiday fun 🙂

Thats a great poem. Its very well done.

timmay… that’s so damn sad… and the strange part is i know what it’s about…

Very Very sad. My mom likes poems i’ll tell her this one.

Very good!! I rilly like the words you use in your poem(s), They made it flow rilly well!