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Drive me crazy
Take my breathe away
Its never complete
Nothing ever is
Til I talk to you
I don’t know what it is
No idea how you do it
You get to me like no one else does
I close my eyes
Your all I see
Being away drives me in sane
The stars in the sky
Shine like your eyes
And tears me a part inside
I’ve fallen for you
And Tears roll on by
Few things can feel like this
Theres nothing in the world
That doesn’t remind me of you
Its all I really have
A gentle breeze reminds me
Of your sweet innoscence
And I can’t understand
What could make you care for me
I’m not even sure
You will the way I do
All I know is
You make it alright
And I want nothing more
Then to be
In your arms
Tonight
I can relate…
damn… that’s a deep poem…
what inspired you? (If I may inquire….)
Shine like your eyes
And tears me a part inside
That is a very powerful stanza. I think you should try to write more like this one or try to not make one like this in a poem that you aren’t really using rhymes with. It stands out too much and takes away from the rest of the poem if you do. Otherwise it was a very good poem, keep it up!
I prefer to have stanzas stand out, aside from that, I just happened to write that not long before it was posted, so time to re-work it had not been achieved.
and tif, my inspiration. . .. lol, being loveless I guess
What female wouldn’t swoon @ having someone write such a beautiful poem about them?
(I know I would….)
What could make you care for me
I’m not even sure
You will the way I do
All I know is
You make it alright
And I want nothing more
Then to be
In your arms
Tonight
… I love those stanzas… *sniffle* so damn prettie deus….. 🙂
*is confuddled*