The Dragon’s Tear

The Dragon’s Tear

swirling red myst
glimmering
gleaming
rolling gently downward
toward the shard of a life lost
the sparkle of hope lost
the world’s beauty turned dank
shimmering gems’ luster dulled
a tiny new existance
once pushing through the
cracks toward a brilliant new world
snuffed out
shattering the barriers that block it
exultant in its one moment of
Glory
only to be greeted by pain
it’s over
and a mother mourns
the loss of new life

Tessa Leigh Heinemann

Copyright �2002 Tessa Leigh Heinemann

hmm…. such a sad poem Tessa.. though very well written…

made me think of a person’s death….. I personally would like to see more of your work… 😀

thank you.. I’ve been thinking of putting more on here but I can’t seem to find any of my favorite poems.. 🙁 oh well, I’ll live, I guess I’ll just write more.

Hey thats pretty darn good. Kinda sad but I still liked it alot. Keep up the great work.

A very good poem. I"m not an expert in poems but I think this poem could have been just a bit more emotional. It’s suppose to be a sad poem, so you want to give it a slower pace. The short lines make the readers read it really fast, and it loses some of its sadness… maybe make "glimmering" and "gleaming" into one line? So it becomes "glimmering… gleaming….". Just a suggestion.

I didn’t want it to be emotional neccesarily, I just wanted it to get its point across. It just turned out being emotional. I just sat down and wrote one day, I didn’t have any idea that I was going to write a poem but poems don’t ask you if you want to write them.. they just sorta happen.