Princess-Toadstool
02-27-2003, 02:11 PM
As I stand overhead, looking at the lake,
my breath makes a sudden sharp intake,
a blackbird dies fast, far away,
life here holds me in it�s very sway.

I look out across the mountain so high,
as mating blackbirds scream a passionate cry,
nature never ending, it will never die,
I know, when the birds dance in the sky.

Smog flows across a polluted land,
nature�s being hurt by a human hand,
the hand of man,
throwing trash and tin cans.

As I stand overhead, looking at the mire,
my heart wills with an inner fire,
to save nature, that is my desire,
though such a cause seems truly dire.

I dream, I wish, passionately,
from such human hatred I want to flee,
but just like we hold the knife, we hold the key,
to rebuild our world, though not as quickly.

Deja
02-28-2003, 02:39 AM
I like this poem. It isn't as good as the other two I've read of yours, but it is still very good. I get what you mean by it, like how humans dont really give a flying rat's ass for nature, like they take advantage of it. (but it's obvious in the poem so ya know :P) good job :)

Autumn
02-28-2003, 04:32 AM
Good poem. It doesn't hold the magic that your other poems did but it's a great read either way.

Kenji
02-28-2003, 10:41 AM
Wasn't really my cup of tea but it was well done.

Your other poems are much better but this was still worth the time to read.

Keep up the good work!