OnlySquared
11-15-2002, 01:48 AM
This is the first full narration of a Fantasy/Sci-fi/Romance that I am currently writing. I've already designed the plot of this story. In fact I have 10 pages of typed notes for it. But, I would like to get some input on narration style, and language devices on this first chapter of my newest story (it's actually a redo) but the plot has changed slightly and the narration style is completely different. The scenes are also modified in actions. Anyway, I REALLY need input, since most of my beta readers are a little reluctant to give me mechanical critisism and only compliment the plot. So, I have attached a .txt since it's the only text file I'm allowed to attach without zipping it. Anyway, thank you for your input.