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I'm venturing to guess you must enjoy writing poetry, correct? I can tell this is something from the heart, and it shows. I had yet to see a trace of poetry on this site worth reading, but I have to congratulate you; this definitely captured me. It's tough for me to be specific with my praise with mere words on the subject of creative writing, so I'll just sum up my thoughts on this by saying . . . keep up the good work.

Thanks for the feedback! I actually don't write poetry too often -- I feel better suited to screenplays and stories -- but I greatly enjoy reading it. I'm glad you liked it! I hope to post more eventually; makes a great break from the rather dry prose of screen action.

No problem! I'm a creative writer too, and I know how hard it can be to please a reader. But don't lose heart; keep at it.

I've never written anything before. But GOOD STUFF! really, I liked it.

I'm not a big fan of poetry, but I can tell you've put a lot of thought into the structure of these piece. I'm a fanfiction/original fiction writer, and to have a good piece of work, requires structure, plot, characters as well as other things. Very good work.