migetsu
04-25-2002, 06:43 PM
This a fragment of a story I'm writing, if you want you may give me you're opion. I don't mind a little critic, because I'll now what to chance;)
That night, Harald had a hard time to catch sleep. He decided it was best to go down stairs and take a glass of water. While he was walking he realised how quiet it was, despite the fact it was midnight you often heard the footsteps of the guards. This time it was however he only heard his own footsteps trough the hall. He grabbed a cup and looked at the window. Now he suddenly realised something. Outside he could perfectly well see every tree, as if it wasn�t night. In confusion he stumbled outside almost tripping over something. It was the leg of a guard who fell asleep. �Hans, Hans!� Harald said, to wake the Hans who guarded the backyard every night, �Wake up.�. Harald pushed Hans softly, but Hans just fell down revealing his neck. Harald noticed some strange stuff on Hans neck, he soon realised that it must be blood. Perhaps he should come a little closer to see it better�. Perhaps he should touch it�.. Perhaps he should taste it�. TASTE IT????!! At this thought Harald jumped up and ran inside. Now he ran through his house without knowing where exactly he was going, but following his instinct, no, following a deep desire. He ran and he ran and still only his footsteps where heard in the house. It made him mad. Suddenly he stopped�. Let�s see where I am, ah yes this the room of the maidens. What am I doing here??! Not knowing why, not wanting to know why, he opened the door. A normal human would have fainted at the sight, why started Harald to drool then? There weren�t any maidens in this room� Well, perhaps here and there a little bit. The whole room was covered in blood. Harald got the feeling he arrived at paradise, while he was looking at all this food. FOOD???!!! Harald quickly closed the door and fell on the ground. He had to go away, he got crazy of the smell that got from under the door. Again he ran without knowing what direction he went. His curiosity prevented him from fighting this strange will which forced him to run. Again he stopped for a door, with all his willpower now he fought the urge to open the door. A sound! That means someone is behind this door. Harald opened the door and immediately recognised the room. This was the dinner room but it seemed as if a big fight had been here. The chairs were all over the room, a closet was thrown on his side and the table was broken in two. The curtains were ripped of so that the moonlight could get in and shine upon the midst of the room. Here there were three persons from who two where standing and one hang in their midst. The two in the midst seemed to be kissing the one in the midst. Apparently they heard Harald entering the room as the two standing looked up. This made the moonlight shine on the face of the third. Harald immediately recognised him as Peter. �What have they done to you?� Harald said as he noticed the blood on the neck of his friend. He now recognised the other two as Lutgor and Nirvana. Harald�s uncle and his bride were still looking at him as Nirvana asked: �Want a bite?� The world now started spinning. Everything made sense now. Harald touched his one teeth, then he grasped a fragment of what once was a mirror and looked in it. And he knew he was right, there was nobody at the other side of the mirror�.. �No!!!!� yelled Harald and fell on his knees, and then with his face on the ground as everything turned dark.
Harald felled someone shake his shoulders and as he opened his eyes the first thing he saw was Nirvana, the sweet, nice girl of yesterday. �I heard you scream, are you ok?� She asked and as Harald nodded, she smiled and left the room.
That night, Harald had a hard time to catch sleep. He decided it was best to go down stairs and take a glass of water. While he was walking he realised how quiet it was, despite the fact it was midnight you often heard the footsteps of the guards. This time it was however he only heard his own footsteps trough the hall. He grabbed a cup and looked at the window. Now he suddenly realised something. Outside he could perfectly well see every tree, as if it wasn�t night. In confusion he stumbled outside almost tripping over something. It was the leg of a guard who fell asleep. �Hans, Hans!� Harald said, to wake the Hans who guarded the backyard every night, �Wake up.�. Harald pushed Hans softly, but Hans just fell down revealing his neck. Harald noticed some strange stuff on Hans neck, he soon realised that it must be blood. Perhaps he should come a little closer to see it better�. Perhaps he should touch it�.. Perhaps he should taste it�. TASTE IT????!! At this thought Harald jumped up and ran inside. Now he ran through his house without knowing where exactly he was going, but following his instinct, no, following a deep desire. He ran and he ran and still only his footsteps where heard in the house. It made him mad. Suddenly he stopped�. Let�s see where I am, ah yes this the room of the maidens. What am I doing here??! Not knowing why, not wanting to know why, he opened the door. A normal human would have fainted at the sight, why started Harald to drool then? There weren�t any maidens in this room� Well, perhaps here and there a little bit. The whole room was covered in blood. Harald got the feeling he arrived at paradise, while he was looking at all this food. FOOD???!!! Harald quickly closed the door and fell on the ground. He had to go away, he got crazy of the smell that got from under the door. Again he ran without knowing what direction he went. His curiosity prevented him from fighting this strange will which forced him to run. Again he stopped for a door, with all his willpower now he fought the urge to open the door. A sound! That means someone is behind this door. Harald opened the door and immediately recognised the room. This was the dinner room but it seemed as if a big fight had been here. The chairs were all over the room, a closet was thrown on his side and the table was broken in two. The curtains were ripped of so that the moonlight could get in and shine upon the midst of the room. Here there were three persons from who two where standing and one hang in their midst. The two in the midst seemed to be kissing the one in the midst. Apparently they heard Harald entering the room as the two standing looked up. This made the moonlight shine on the face of the third. Harald immediately recognised him as Peter. �What have they done to you?� Harald said as he noticed the blood on the neck of his friend. He now recognised the other two as Lutgor and Nirvana. Harald�s uncle and his bride were still looking at him as Nirvana asked: �Want a bite?� The world now started spinning. Everything made sense now. Harald touched his one teeth, then he grasped a fragment of what once was a mirror and looked in it. And he knew he was right, there was nobody at the other side of the mirror�.. �No!!!!� yelled Harald and fell on his knees, and then with his face on the ground as everything turned dark.
Harald felled someone shake his shoulders and as he opened his eyes the first thing he saw was Nirvana, the sweet, nice girl of yesterday. �I heard you scream, are you ok?� She asked and as Harald nodded, she smiled and left the room.