Bus Driver
01-21-2007, 04:17 AM
A sound an echo...
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!
Pimp Daddy McSnake
01-22-2007, 02:40 AM
This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word 'bullshit' with 'hamsters'.
Touchstone
01-26-2007, 12:00 AM
A sound an echo...
No just bullshit
The voice the laughter..
No just bullshit
The smiles, the tears
No just bullshit
The smoke, the mirrors
Clearly bullshit

So lets smoke a box of cigars!
Drink a gallon brandy!
Empty a sea of beer!
Power to the alcoholics!!!

Go Alcoholics go!!
Meph
01-26-2007, 08:52 PM
D:
Jarosik
02-07-2007, 04:49 PM
I love it. Best poem ever.
TK
02-15-2007, 08:18 AM
This poem would have been a lot better if you replaced the word 'bullshit' with 'hamsters'.

Agreed.

Repeating a line is only effective if it's a really good line. "No just bullshit" is just kind of... everyday talk. Doesn't really feel like you're conveying much.