I see the blade
Sunlight flashing
Each blink of my eye is a second of life
Do you see
Its my hara-kiri

I bring the sword down by my side
The sheath is empty
The blade comes closer to my side
I blink again
The blade touches by side
I feel a sting
The blade slides through my skin
The pain is gone
Blood rushes down my side
I tear the blade from my side
And prepare for another stage

I move it to the other side
The blade crushes my veins
Blood rushes down my side
As the other gushes its final pint
I feel another sting
But a blink
And its gone
I cannot stand on my feet anymore
I smile at death
It smiles back at me
And then we grab hands
And fly to the heavens
As my bloody, lifeless body
Is left alone
With its smile of agony
Still left on its pale face

ahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha

I have to admit, you never fail to make me laugh with your god-awful poetry. Seriously, it just gets worse every time you post a new one, but it gets funnier also.

if u wud put all ur stuff into 1 thred dat wud b gr8 thx.

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What the fuck? This isn't poetry, not by a long shot. It's emo bullshit made to look like poetry by a very inept self-aggrandizing fucktard.

if u wud put all ur stuff into 1 thred dat wud b gr8 thx.

True, and it would be easier to view for me ^^

I have to say, I liked this one but not as much as some of your others. The main thing I really enjoyed was the second stanza....it had a back and forth feel.... Your description is brilliant here, making me breathless as I wait for what is to happen. I like the line claiming him to be waiting for another stage... it really leads well into the last stanza, where there is actually death. Your view of death is very abstracted, instead of being a sinking, unpleasant feeling...the writer says he is flying ^^ I like this view, actually...however, in the last couple of lines we are all reminded that before this beautiful rapture, we have one final, painstaking moment of agony. Wow.

What the fuck? All your credibility is gone now. Any moron can see that it's some ignorant emo kid's inaccurate view of a subject he doesn't comprehend, much less convey in any way that can even potentially be meaningful.

At least I back up my claims instead of waltzing in here like a pansy retard and going OMFG STOP or THATS RETARDED! <.<' BTW, some of the best poetry comes from confusing views on subjects, or ones that aren't accepted by others. No one really knows what death is like...but fresh views are always welcomed in the world of GOOD poetry. It takes a talented poet to think outside of the box, which you OBVIOUSLY cannot do ^^, repeating the same "ahahahaha that's retarded" over and over again. So juvenile -_- If you can write any better, show me. If not, then STFU.

I have absolutely nothing to prove to you, thank you very much. Also, you are a tremendous retard for holding the ignorant elitist view that only people who write poetry can recognize good poetry. And don't say that you don't, because you've implied it on at least two occasions, even if you haven't said it outright.

I have absolutely nothing to prove to you, thank you very much.

Because you can't do anything worth it. Absolutely. And no, Thank YOU ^^

As if you could possibly know that, you ignorant cunt.

As if you could possibly know that, you ignorant cunt.

Lack of intelligent posts + regurgitated insults = proof ^^By the way....I'm tired of wasting time on people who have no hopes of gaining any more maturity.

No one really knows what death is like...but fresh views are always welcomed in the world of GOOD poetry.

I really fail to see what's so "fresh" about BS's view of death here. Death's been personified for ages, so his personification here isn't exactly fresh. Perhaps if he made the last bit about flying away with Death into some sort of "riding off into the sunset" type of deal or personifying Death as a lost love of sorts, it'd be interesting, but as is, it's pretty stale and downright boring.


I'm tired of wasting time on people who have no hopes of gaining any more maturity.

This coming from somebody who deifies a fictional villain from a second-rate video game... :rolleyes:

This one is god-awful. The repetition of words and the 'step-by-step' crap alone makes it horrid.

I also take offense to the fact that this shithead clusterfuck's threads have more posts than my thread.

I'm tired of wasting time on people who have no hopes of gaining any more maturity.
Then gtfo if you don't like it, for fucks sake.