All my poems, every last one.

I Feel Something Special: A *special* poem by BizarroSephiroth

I grasp a special feeling
Inside of me
A feeling i have something
Who will be
My love
Forever

A new day comes, and i still can feel it
Warm sun all around
Shining on my eyes
I feel in love now, but what can i say
I feel a special feeling
In me

I see the sunset
Blood-red sky
I stay with her and watch the darkness
Rise into her eyes
And when i see the starlight
I wish upon a star
That you'll be in love forever
Enduring
On and on

Time passes quickly and its morningrise
Love strikes me with awe
Once again i wait out the day
Until i see her
Shining bright
In the warmth
Of the new daylight

But one day i find she's gone
I cry my heart out
That sense of love is gone
But i must find her again

I see her lying on a bed
I cannot see the wound
Until i stare straight down at her
And lean right next to her

Blood is racing out of her
The doctors try their best
They want me out
But I won't leave
I want to stay by you

Eventually they force me out
But i leave with one last kiss
I leave her room
Eventually the hospital
But a miracle comes

She runs straight through my door
I run and pick her up and show her
I love her
And she shows me
That same affection
We had under the stars
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Friends- A Poem by BS

Friends may mean the world to me
Their always there when i need them
Time passes by, more and more happens
And yet they still stand at your side

In physical form, friends can help
When you are being picked on
By a person, a bully, who's in your way
Of living your life

When something happens, they are there
Standing there, comforting
Showing that you mean something to them
And that they can feel your pain

Even online, friends really help
Even if they aren't there
They show that no matter what
They can still
Care

Life goes on, and we will try
To keep in touch all the time
But sometimes things happen
That ruin a relationship
Forever

I want to keep my friends
For they mean the world to me
In front of me or across an ocean
They are my friends
No matter what
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Mistaken People, HellBound Souls: A Poem By BS

Some friends in life can
Hold you when your scared
Comfort when your sad
And stay by your near death
But those hellish fools on Earth
Who ruin the lives of all
Must be stopped
Hellbound they are
With Satan they shall live
Forever

They are the ones who cause crime
They are the ones who cheat
They are the ones who sit down
In there cars and fire out their window
As they move along the street

Forget them, we can't stand up,
thats what people say
But we must or else this Earth will be
A Hellish waste of death and torment

Every day i hear al least once
Someone has died today
What the hell is wrong with these
People
Are they crazy? Are they insane?

Each one feels killing is not bad
And jail is not scary
So we must kill them all
Or at least rid the world of all this hate
So we can all get
Along

Friends will never turn out this way
Because there is always a good soul
In you
To send them the right way
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Vincents Poem: A Lonely Life- An FF7 based poem by BS

Slipping so far from life
Drifting through an endless
Sky of black and evil thoughts
Surrounding my lonely body
Of shame and death

Time is losing its meaning to me
All i wish to do is find
The love of my life
Lucrecia
And put an end to my torment

I crawl into my coffin
Alone, dark in despair
Trying to get a hold of myself
Is harder than i expected

I transform into the unknown
And cause death, destruction
But only to find you
Lucrecia

I wish for you
But I cannot find
A light in my dead soul
Full of deep darkness
And dying feelings
Of love that are slowly
Tearing me apart

My cape flutters in the wind
As i wait in the darkness and rain and lightining
Thunder cracks, but i dont care
I will wait for you
Lucrecia

And if you don't show up soon
I will look for you
For what is my purpose in life
Without you by my side
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Poem of a Dying Soul- By BizarroSephiroth

I lay in a bed
In a cold dark
Hospital room
I wish for you to be here
Why are you not?
Everyone is here but you
My love.
I long to see you
I want to see your face
Before I go

My lungs are weak
My stomach is sick
And you are not here
Why?

You finally came
I waited for hours
I need you here beside me
I cower in fear of death
I want to be with you forever
Hold me in your arms now
Before I go

You are here
Finally here
I've waited for a time
That seemed like forever
I love you so much
And now i can see you
Again

Your arms wrapped around me
Fills me with a joy unkown to anyone
I need to feel this way to keep living
I am of a young age
Don't you see?
I don't deserve to die
But it is inevitable
Please kiss me upon my lips
Before I go

You hold me tight
But I start to feel cold
My life is drifting away
My soul is losing it's will to go on
Love me please, more and more
I feel your tears drip onto my face
I don't want to leave you
But suddenly a feeling of happiness surrounds me
The power of love is gripping my hands
You i see in my eyes
As my heart slowly gains speed again
I wonder if i will live to love you any longer
I hope i do not
Have to go

Death is trying to steal me from you
But I am pulling away
For ten straight weeks i fight this battle against the Reaper
Who i see in my mind
Gripping one arm
As you have the other
Love is defeating evil
And i feel you will win
Please, I love you so
So much.

I awaken from a deep sleep
I have been in this hospital for 4 months
You've never left my side yet
And I thank you
For the doctor said that
I'd be well
But he doesn't know how
But i do
It was
Love!


At home we celebrate
For my freedom of the pitch white room
Of the hospital
My life was full of terror and sadness
Until you came

Infinitely I will end up like this again
And this will repeat itself
And you'll be there right
By my side
Holding my hand as i fight
Again
Against the devil's wicked grasp

You will too, there is no avoiding it
But no matter what
I will be there
Sick and dying i will stay by your side
Helping you fight
That same battle
I went through

70 years will pass and I am back
In the devil's white room of demise
No decorations
Just pitch white paint
With words in my head
Telling me to let go
But I love you
And I don't want to leave you yet
Never

My old crippled body cannot take it
You still stand there next to me
Along with the ghostly images of my family
In my head
It's been forever
Many years of love
Will fade away
Right here and now
I'll see you in Heaven

My eyes close
My heart stops
My lungs dry
My life floats
Away on a cloud
Where I'll see you soon
But I'll be your guardian angel
Until the time comes
For you to follow me
In that pitch white room

Don't cry
It's okay
I feel the same way
I miss you so
Your hand still clenches mine
As you cry more than ever
Trying to bring me to life
But this time
You cannot

Suicide is not an option
I hear you muttering those thoughts
But then you faint
Quickly
And meet me
Up on that cloud
In the sky
Together forever
You and I are
Now
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The Perfect Life- A Poem by BS

Alot of people say
A perfect world
Is one without terrorism
Death, and sadness
And love over all
My life is nothing of this
I live with all this
Surrounding me
Shrouding me in clouds of darkness
As I wait for the light to free me

Terrorist ruin our country
Everything has to be their way
But maybe if we just settled our differences
We would all be alive today

Death ruins our innermost hearts
It turns us into statues of black
Standing, stoic, staring
At our loss
Of life in our own
Lives

Sadness covers my life the most
I cry over ever other thing
War, death, and without any love
I weep in my head
In my mind
In my soul

Without love i am an empty shell
Standing there, hoping that one will come by
To love me
And change my life, and to agree by
Seeing the lives of the people in this world
Suffering in a tormenting Hell

We need change
That's all I'll say
The power of demons
Infecting our land
Isn't too much for us to handle
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A Poem About This World (Earth)- By BS

This planet is full of bad
All across the seas
The war rages on, and we just stay here
Walking in the breeze

Life makes us feel stupid sometimes
We just sit around with nothing to do
But we know, somewhere else in the world
That some horrible plan has become true

We don't even try to do anything
We barely even care
We think that war will end somehow
Without even a little of our help to share

Over here in New York City
We encountered a horrible attack
On September 11, 2001
A memory we can never reject

I could see the World Trade Center
Out in my backyard
And when it collapsed I couldn't resist
To just cry so hard

All over the world there are homeless
People who don't have anything
They are probably thinking about suicide
Or just continue persisting

And everyone else, you probably know what i mean
Seeing that this is all true
But there's one thing that we know
We will keep on living through

No matter how hard we try
No matter how bad we wish we could
Help those people who are in need
Because if we got the chance, we would.
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My Heart: A Poem by BS

My soul is empty
My spirit is lost
My life has nobody
In it who can cost
The world to me and that's who i need
To be by my side when i feel deceived
And I can be there too
Whenever they are hurt

I want to spend my life with someone
So when I'm feeling sad
She can make me feel at home again
And tell me I'm not bad
But I feel this time will never come
But i will keep on trying
For i wish for a partner
who'll be there when i am crying

I'm lost without a person
To love forever
And I wish i could feel what others do
Because then I would never
Have to think about this loss of soul
That's inside my human river of
Love and care in my spirit alone
Nothing else, nothing more
Everything else,greed and hatred and evil,were gone before
I was born

I live to love
And nothing else
Can't I have one day
Where this feeling doesn't fill me with sadness
I want to love, but
Love is a shadow to me,
as I am to it.
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My past- A poem by BS

My past is full of feelings
Of sadness, happiness, and anger
But the one i feel most in me
Is love.

Life can be a crazy hodgepodge
Of things happening left and right
Things can just be hectic,
No matter how dark or how bright
It is

My past has many things
That I wish to forget
But I cannot, because I hate the feeling
Of regret

Things are annoying, yes I know
I've been through it all
But times now are hard
With war and hatred and death prevailing
Over love and happiness and bliss
It's time to turn the tables folks
And see what we had missed

Sept 11, one thing I'll never forget
Had been put in my past forever
Ever since I saw the report
I think of the innocent people who died
And the heroic actions of the fireman and cops
Who tried to make sure we would live through to
the end

And we did, didn't we,
And now were fighting back
But the more and more the innocent people die before our hands
We grow
In sadness and woe.
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All the Young Children- A Poem by BS in Freeverse

Young children are our future, our lives, sometimes
They are bright and wonderful to have
But times things happen to them that they don't deserve
That may ruin their lives,
forever

Drugs are out there, corrupting their minds
Crime is out there, confusing their lives
People are out there, ruining their lives
And all we do,
is watch

We investigate after he's dead
From all this terror out there
Why can't we search the minute something happens?
So the boy who may become
The greatest man on Earth
Won't die.

Everywhere, anywhere, something can happen
To people
By talking, then meeting, they can be raped, shot, anything
By just getting a "car ride", they can be assaulted,
And what do WE do about anything,
NOTHING!
Except search after the kid has died.
Why not the minute he's captured,
then he can live.
Obviously
No one has thought of that, have they?

Kids need saving, so they've been given
Help to avoid the near unavoidable
But if they listen, like the bright smart people they are.
They'll live to see their inevitable end
__________________________________________________ ____________

lol, only half of us suck.

Yes, only half of you people suck. You don't.......yet...........

What exactly are the half that suck sucking?

You don't.......yet...........

I'll consider that my first warning. O:]

I tell you what sucks. POETRY

I see you still suck Bizzaro, your poetry is as bad as sakura's.
Care to tell us who the people that suck are... don't forget to add you and your little girlfriend to the list when you do alright.

Wow I really like your poetry... Especially the poetry of a dying soul! and in I feel something special i like this stanza:

I see the sunset
Blood-red sky
I stay with her and watch the darkness
Rise into her eyes
And when i see the starlight
I wish upon a star
That you'll be in love forever
Enduring
On and on

Oh man, no matter what others say you have talent! it's just that they all have different tastes and don't know how to say that without being rude!

But nice job! I'm gonna look for any other threads of yours! :swoon:

But nice job! I'm gonna look for any other threads of yours! :swoon:

lol, someone has a fangirl. Next thing you know she'll be stalking you :)

lol, someone has a fangirl. Next thing you know she'll be stalking you :)

No... i don't think so...

Oh man, no matter what others say you have talent! it's just that they all have different tastes and don't know how to say that without being rude!

Actually, we just appreciate decent poetry. You're too dumb to know the difference, so you like it.

Actually, we just appreciate decent poetry. You're too dumb to know the difference, so you like it.

Yeah listen to Megatron, he's got a lasercannon.=-O

Actually, we just appreciate decent poetry. You're too dumb to know the difference, so you like it.

Who are you to Classify anything as decent for everyone. I think his poetry is decent, I happen to like it, in my own opinion.

However there is a distinct difference in constructive critism and being rude as i was pointing out. He (or she) is not looking for someone to say it sucks but to say" well this stanza is kinda used and it could be made better by..." something like that.

All you seem to do Megatron is be rude, since your such a poetry guru, how about you tell us what is wrong with his poem rather than say it isn't decent or "thankyou for filling our bad poetry quota for the month" as you've done in other threads i have read.

And Everyone Does have different tastes in poetry as i said before,you are a clear example of that and you can't seem to be able to express that with out being rude. (some might share certain interest in poetry but the majority like different poetry if not, you and i would both hate or like bizzaro's poetry)

As for me being so dumb not to know the difference between decent and bad poetry. That goes back to my tastes personally i like the poems of Jim and now the poetry of Bizzaro and yet i can't find Emily Dickinson interesting even though she is a world reknown poet. So tell me Prak am i dumb for having different tastes from you? Am i dumb because others here express that they hate bizzaro's poetry and yet i say i like it? Am i dumb for being contrary, to everyone else? If so remember Prak you're quite contrary too, so are you dumb as well?

Who are you to Classify anything as decent for everyone. I think his poetry is decent, I happen to like it, in my own opinion.

Your opinion is wrong and is based in ignorance.


However there is a distinct difference in constructive critism and being rude as i was pointing out. He (or she) is not looking for someone to say it sucks but to say" well this stanza is kinda used and it could be made better by..." something like that.

Been there. Tried that. He's a cunt, so not gonna bother.


All you seem to do Megatron is be rude, since your such a poetry guru, how about you tell us what is wrong with his poem rather than say it isn't decent or "thankyou for filling our bad poetry quota for the month" as you've done in other threads i have read.

Not a chance. I'm not going to write an essay about what's wrong with every last syllable of that drivel.


And Everyone Does have different tastes in poetry as i said before,you are a clear example of that and you can't seem to be able to express that with out being rude. (some might share certain interest in poetry but the majority like different poetry if not, you and i would both hate or like bizzaro's poetry)

Do I look like I give a damn? I really don't. The fact of the matter is that your "tastes" are simply your own personal likings/dislikings and do not have a bearing on actual quality, which is what I look at. If you were a bit less egocentric, you might see the same thing.


As for me being so dumb not to know the difference between decent and bad poetry. That goes back to my tastes personally i like the poems of Jim and now the poetry of Bizzaro and yet i can't find Emily Dickinson interesting even though she is a world reknown poet.

And your point is? You still haven't made a point worth reading. All you're doing is describing your own ignorant views, which is basically worthless to everyone else.


So tell me Prak am i dumb for having different tastes from you?

Part of me is very tempted to say yes.


Am i dumb because others here express that they hate bizzaro's poetry and yet i say i like it?

No, you're dumb for saying that nothing we said matters and that we're all wrong and the shitty poet wannabe is actually talented despite the fact that popular opinion among those far more knowledgable than you says otherwise.


Am i dumb for being contrary, to everyone else? If so remember Prak you're quite contrary too, so are you dumb as well?

I am never contrary. What I am is consistent with reason. Others are simply contrary to it, and thus they are contrary to me. I follow reason to the letter, never deviating from it. That is what separates me from lesser beings.

i just wanna say that his poem is excellent

i can't do poem like that, i just love to eat

I think I like Bizarro's FF7 fan-fiction more, at least I got a laugh out of reading it. This poetry, if it can even be called that, is some of the worst stuff I've read outside of those shitty little fan stories you'll see at Star Trek conventions. My God! Those will give you nightmares.

My grade for this thread's poetry is... BS

Hey! Aren't those your initials, Bizzaro?

Prak, more like Spock.

Also, most of those poems are rubbish. And BS's attitude doesn't help his cause one bit.

Your opinion is wrong and is based in ignorance.

Firstly, if it is an opinion, then it can't be wrong because it is how I feel. Opnions can be misguided, they can make no sence whatsoever but they are never wrong because they are opinions. Ignorance pertaining to lack of knowledge that only you seem to have or Ignorance pertaining to the fact that you just don't like my opinion?



Been there. Tried that. He's a cunt, so not gonna bother.

For some reason I believe your idea of constructive critism is simply saying that it sucks. Without a helpful reason or a nice reason. But honestly, i don't care i was simply stating a point because you didn't seem to know the difference.



Not a chance. I'm not going to write an essay about what's wrong with every last syllable of that drivel.

I didn't ask for an essay Megatron, and essay from you would be even more annoying than reading your posts. Any way I asked for construtive critism, but once again you seem incapable of doing that.



Do I look like I give a damn? I really don't. The fact of the matter is that your "tastes" are simply your own personal likings/dislikings and do not have a bearing on actual quality, which is what I look at. If you were a bit less egocentric, you might see the same thing.

If you didn't give a damn about my "tastes" you wouldn't have bothered telling me that i was too dumb to know the difference between decent poetry and bad poetry.



And your point is? You still haven't made a point worth reading. All you're doing is describing your own ignorant views, which is basically worthless to everyone else.

My point being once again, i am not wrong for saying I like bizzaro's poetry. IT IS MY OPINION and although you are right in saying that my opinions are worthless to everyone else *because they are* I still have the right to post them as you have a right to post you're rude opinions.



No, you're dumb for saying that nothing we said matters and that we're all wrong and the shitty poet wannabe is actually talented despite the fact that popular opinion among those far more knowledgable than you says otherwise.

Not once did i say that nothing anyone else said didn't matter.
I recall saying that "no matter what others say you have talent." It was an encouragement that i was giving him that you obviously mistook for me saying "don't take their critism" because Bizzaro has a talent, fact is that it may not be aparent but because he can put the stanzas together and make a certain type of sence, that is talent. But now i know to make it clearer for you in the future alright?



I am never contrary. What I am is consistent with reason. Others are simply contrary to it, and thus they are contrary to me. I follow reason to the letter, never deviating from it. That is what separates me from lesser beings.

What was it that you called me before... oh yeah egocentric...
Now tell me where have i ever posted a self worshiping reply anywhere in this forum.
You, my dear, are the egocentric one... I mean you believe that you are a higher being.

Bottom Line.
All I said was that i liked some of his poetry and that i believe that he has talent.*I am allowed to say that* Of course he can work on it, he can improve but he can only do that with constructive critsm from his fellow shriners. You Prak seem to not be able to do that and I was pointing that out, you have different tastes than myself and you Can't express that without being rude.
You haven't been able to do it yet!

You really don't know how to quit, but I am mildly amused, so I will carry on.


Firstly, if it is an opinion, then it can't be wrong because it is how I feel. Opnions can be misguided, they can make no sence whatsoever but they are never wrong because they are opinions. Ignorance pertaining to lack of knowledge that only you seem to have or Ignorance pertaining to the fact that you just don't like my opinion?

Do you know what the difference between fact and opinion is? I'll explain.

Facts are immutable. They are constant, unchanging, and not subject to interpretation.

An example of a statement of fact is, "I am sitting in a chair," or "I like that movie."

Opinions are distortions or denials of fact made by flawed human minds which are not capable or comfortable with reality.

An example of an opinion is, "BizarroSephiroth's poems are good." It is presented as a fact, but it is clearly inaccurate. Therefore, it is an opinion.

Class dismissed.


For some reason I believe your idea of constructive critism is simply saying that it sucks. Without a helpful reason or a nice reason. But honestly, i don't care i was simply stating a point because you didn't seem to know the difference.

Wat you believe is irrelevant. When you know something, then you can discuss the matter with me. The fact of the matter is that I have quite often posted very useful constructive criticism that others have used to better their work.


I didn't ask for an essay Megatron, and essay from you would be even more annoying than reading your posts. Any way I asked for construtive critism, but once again you seem incapable of doing that.

Why should I give constructive criticism upon your request? The person who wrote the drivel is not going to make use of it, so posting it would be worthless and an utter waste of my time. I find that my time is far more satisfyingly spent annoying you.


If you didn't give a damn about my "tastes" you wouldn't have bothered telling me that i was too dumb to know the difference between decent poetry and bad poetry.

<--- My point.







<--- Your head.


My point being once again, i am not wrong for saying I like bizzaro's poetry. IT IS MY OPINION and although you are right in saying that my opinions are worthless to everyone else *because they are* I still have the right to post them as you have a right to post you're rude opinions.

See above about facts and opinions.

Also, "you're" is a contraction that means "you are." The possessive term you're (see the proper use?) looking for is "your."


Not once did i say that nothing anyone else said didn't matter.
I recall saying that "no matter what others say you have talent." It was an encouragement that i was giving him that you obviously mistook for me saying "don't take their critism" because Bizzaro has a talent, fact is that it may not be aparent but because he can put the stanzas together and make a certain type of sence, that is talent. But now i know to make it clearer for you in the future alright?

The key words are "no matter what others say." By saying that, you are entirely discounting the input given by anyone who disagrees with you and claiming that all of us are wrong.

You also have a rather skeweed definition of talent. Talent is not the same as knowledge of how to put a stanza together. Most grade-schoolers are taught to do that.


What was it that you called me before... oh yeah egocentric...
Now tell me where have i ever posted a self worshiping reply anywhere in this forum.
You, my dear, are the egocentric one... I mean you believe that you are a higher being.

The next lesson for today is an introduction to the use of sarcasm in mockery...


Bottom Line.
All I said was that i liked some of his poetry and that i believe that he has talent.*I am allowed to say that* Of course he can work on it, he can improve but he can only do that with constructive critsm from his fellow shriners. You Prak seem to not be able to do that and I was pointing that out, you have different tastes than myself and you Can't express that without being rude.
You haven't been able to do it yet!

And now for the other bottom line.

As I showed before, you did not say that you believe he has talent, you said that he has talent, which implied that the rest of us were wrong. You presented an opinion instead of fact, which always makes you look silly when confronted by someone who understands the dichotomy of the concept.

BizarroSephiroth has had his chance at constructive criticism, but blew it off because he didn't want to believe anything was wrong in the first place. That is a mark of a very poor writer.

I can certainly express my views without being rude. I simply have a hard time tolerating people who proclaim my views to be wrong without due debate.

No you are right.
I don't quit but then again, why should I?

I did know the difference between Fact and Opinion, and I expressed that in my opinion "Bizzaro has talent". The way I presented this doesn't matter if i clearly stated that it was a personal opinion. *which i did* I expressed that it was my opinion a number of times.

BTB sice you don't seem to get it.
An opinion is a personal view, attitude, or appraisal.

Opinion.
—Synonyms 1. persuasion, notion, idea, impression. Opinion, sentiment, view are terms for one's conclusion about something. An opinion is a belief or judgment that falls short of absolute conviction, certainty, or positive knowledge; it is a conclusion that certain facts, ideas, etc., are probably true or likely to prove so: political opinions; an opinion about art; In my opinion this is true. Sentiment (usually pl.) refers to a rather fixed conviction, usually based on feeling or emotion rather than reasoning: These are my sentiments. View is an estimate of something, an intellectual judgment, a critical survey based on a mental examination, particularly of a public matter: views on governmental planning.

Opinions are completely the person's choice, and or belief.
Therefore once again, in my opinion, Bizzaro has talent.

As for flawed human minds, every human mind has at least one flaw, no mind is perfect and that is a proven fact. So if an opinions are "distortions or denials of fact made by flawed human minds which are not capable or comfortable with reality." So be it my mind can have it's flaws it's normal and i am entitltled to my opinion.

Now as for the rest of whatever it was you posted, I apreciate your lessons
*notice the correct use of "your" which actually is funny because you couldn't spell "dumb" a few posts ago*

Do you know that you just posted that entire bit without being rude to me, Bravo! you are learning!

Bizzaro Has Talent.
That is what i am going to say, you can qoute me all you want but this is how i am going to say it. He has a talent for writing poetry period, some people can't even put one staza together and so everyone who can to that has a talent

Talent.
a power of mind or body considered as given to a person for use and improvement

As i've said Bizzaro has a talent, and as i've said he can improve.
I must say though that you're right, he didn't take the CC so well in other threads, but being a prick about it doesn't help much. If you know that he doesn't apreciate you why bother reading his poetry as you seem to do always and why bother posting a reply.

Now you don't have to answer that because you are a "higher being" and i am not worthy of an answer from you.(egocentric...)

Anyway, I agree with you on most things and the only thing now that you haven't convinced me of it the fact that bizzaro has no talent at all.
Elementary kids can puyt stanza's together yes but can they do it multiple times on a heart felt topic such as death, love and the tradgedy of 9/11.
That would be a no, although i'm sure you're going to argue this point.

To Everyone Else
If you're as touchy as Prak on the opinions of others, I apologize for not being clear on this and i din't mean to imply that you are wrong.=)

FYI, I've gotten my defintions off of Dictionary.com

Average. nothing special. I can see which half you're in.

No you are right.
I don't quit but then again, why should I?

I did know the difference between Fact and Opinion, and I expressed that in my opinion "Bizzaro has talent". The way I presented this doesn't matter if i clearly stated that it was a personal opinion. *which i did* I expressed that it was my opinion a number of times.

BTB sice you don't seem to get it.
An opinion is a personal view, attitude, or appraisal.

Opinion.
�Synonyms 1. persuasion, notion, idea, impression. Opinion, sentiment, view are terms for one's conclusion about something. An opinion is a belief or judgment that falls short of absolute conviction, certainty, or positive knowledge; it is a conclusion that certain facts, ideas, etc., are probably true or likely to prove so: political opinions; an opinion about art; In my opinion this is true. Sentiment (usually pl.) refers to a rather fixed conviction, usually based on feeling or emotion rather than reasoning: These are my sentiments. View is an estimate of something, an intellectual judgment, a critical survey based on a mental examination, particularly of a public matter: views on governmental planning.

Opinions are completely the person's choice, and or belief.
Therefore once again, in my opinion, Bizzaro has talent.

As for flawed human minds, every human mind has at least one flaw, no mind is perfect and that is a proven fact. So if an opinions are "distortions or denials of fact made by flawed human minds which are not capable or comfortable with reality." So be it my mind can have it's flaws it's normal and i am entitltled to my opinion.

Now as for the rest of whatever it was you posted, I apreciate your lessons
*notice the correct use of "your" which actually is funny because you couldn't spell "dumb" a few posts ago*

Do you know that you just posted that entire bit without being rude to me, Bravo! you are learning!

Bizzaro Has Talent.
That is what i am going to say, you can qoute me all you want but this is how i am going to say it. He has a talent for writing poetry period, some people can't even put one staza together and so everyone who can to that has a talent

Talent.
a power of mind or body considered as given to a person for use and improvement

As i've said Bizzaro has a talent, and as i've said he can improve.
I must say though that you're right, he didn't take the CC so well in other threads, but being a prick about it doesn't help much. If you know that he doesn't apreciate you why bother reading his poetry as you seem to do always and why bother posting a reply.

Now you don't have to answer that because you are a "higher being" and i am not worthy of an answer from you.(egocentric...)

Anyway, I agree with you on most things and the only thing now that you haven't convinced me of it the fact that bizzaro has no talent at all.
Elementary kids can puyt stanza's together yes but can they do it multiple times on a heart felt topic such as death, love and the tradgedy of 9/11.
That would be a no, although i'm sure you're going to argue this point.

To Everyone Else
If you're as touchy as Prak on the opinions of others, I apologize for not being clear on this and i din't mean to imply that you are wrong.=)

FYI, I've gotten my defintions off of Dictionary.com


thank you :-) i wish there were more people like you who can just say that even though i am good i can improve. Thats the types of answers i was hoping to get:-)

Of course you were hoping to get replies like that. You're an egotistical idiot who wants a glossed-over, sugar-coated version of reality instead of the harsh truth that you have absolutely no literary skill or talent of any sort.

thank you :-) i wish there were more people like you who can just say that even though i am good i can improve. Thats the types of answers i was hoping to get:-)

The thing is though...you're not good. At least, not yet. Sorry to have to say it so plainly, but it's true. Maybe with enough time and practice, you'll be better, but right now you don't need to hear compliments to soothe your bruised ego. Although Prak is being harsh, his advice was still accurate. Still though, you did have some nicely written images which suggests an imagination that could become better the more you read other poems and write your own. Do you have a diary that you write in, or some kind of poem book? I suggest, if you don't already do, writing every day and night if you really want to improve. I also suggest reading as much and as many different kinds of poetry as possible because there's still a streak of immaturity in your writing that will only disappear with experience and time.

So, bottom line, potential is there but instead of focusing on this one-man tirade to show that you can post your poetry and you don't care what people think, make it good enough to where they can't say anything but "wow". Hope that helps.

And Angel, if you want to help someone become a better writer, tell them what's right and wrong with their work. Because, imo, only telling a writer that you liked his/her work when it is flawed will only strenghthen their opinion that nothing's wrong with it. You can like a poem and still find mistakes within it. "I really liked your second stanza, but...." should usually be how a critique is, unless you're critiquing the work of the most brilliant poet to ever live, and even then you may have a problem with his/her style. Writers need to hear both the good as well as the bad in order to become great writers.

Of course you were hoping to get replies like that. You're an egotistical idiot who wants a glossed-over, sugar-coated version of reality instead of the harsh truth that you have absolutely no literary skill or talent of any sort.

Calling him egotistical is idiotic because i remember a few post ago where you had a "over inflated ego" and once again i'm forced to tell you that Bizzaro has a talent and just because you disagree does not mean that you can put him down and say that he is shit.

Anyway Megatron, i believe he was talking to me and there for it really isn't your place to reply. So could you stop being a jerk please and find something else better to do than harass, *um no... not the right word* annoy people on this forum.

And Shadowblade i have to agree with you completely, Bizzaro can improve and he just need to accept help .
And i did tell him the ups and downs of his poetry in a PM i just didn't post it. I am aware of how to help someone, it's just that i didn't want to do it on this thread and so i sent a message.
But thankyou anyway!
and nice Av

Oh, please pardon me for not pandering to your pathetic need for people to always agree with each other and play nice all the time even when someone needs a punch in the fucking nose.

Also, how can you agree with shadowblade when he said basically the same thing I did, except not quite as abrasively? Are you simply a hypocrite or are your reading comprehension skills so poorly lacking that you couldn't tell that much?

Oh, please pardon me for not pandering to your pathetic need for people to always agree with each other and play nice all the time even when someone needs a punch in the fucking nose.

Also, how can you agree with shadowblade when he said basically the same thing I did, except not quite as abrasively? Are you simply a hypocrite or are your reading comprehension skills so poorly lacking that you couldn't tell that much?

You're excused!

No my dear, the difference between the two of you is simple: He said what we all needed to hear in such away that it helped Bizzaro realize his faults and made me realize how to help someone else improve in there writing. It made me realize the quality of Bizzaro's work and how unhelpful my opinion was in this matter, especially because i wasn't constructively critisizing anything myself and yet i was asking for you too.

You didn't do that at all, not as nicely or otherwise.

I apologize that you haven't realized this and that you needed to inquire about it, but then again you ARE a higher being right? and so then i wouldn't expect you to understand what Shadow Blade said because he is such a lesser being along with Bizzaro and myself.

Now i know that you are going to think of something really witty and rude to reply with, you might even launch another personal attack, but i've only got about 20 minutes left in this period so try to be quick about it okay!

But you miss an important factor. I already covered the bases he did and had my good intentions spurned by BS. You cannot reasonably expect him to be treated with respect after that.

Oh look. Nothing rude there. I amaze even myself sometimes!

*Angel* more like EoFF sympathist mir?

But you miss an important factor. I already covered the bases he did and had my good intentions spurned by BS. You cannot reasonably expect him to be treated with respect after that.

Oh look. Nothing rude there. I amaze even myself sometimes!

Hmm... Good point.
The fact of the matter is, the entire reason why we had a disagreement (if you could call it that) is because I was trying to offer a compliment and you decided to but in with an unnessiary comment and then because you didn't explain what you just have (the post above) at all so clearly and or so nicely. When a person is attacking i tend to be defensive, but then again most people do. But I get it... and i get your point.

Although i do understand where you are coming from and i understand you angle at this and so i have to agree that in your case there is room for resentment when it comes to Bizzaro.

But that doesn't mean that when another decides that they like him that you can attack them. That Is Just Rude. But i don't know why i'm trying to explain this to you because i doubt you really care. So really there is no more need to try and explain myself to you now is there?

Oh and Way not to be rude with that last post!:-D I am proud of you and i know if you can be that nice with that post and maybe a little less sarcastic you could be a nice person.:-D

BTW, considering that i just joined this site nice meeting you Prak.

Yeah... Bryan what the hell are you talking about?

The fact of the matter is, the entire reason why we had a disagreement (if you could call it that) is because I was trying to offer a compliment and you decided to but in with an unnessiary comment and then because you didn't explain what you just have (the post above) at all so clearly and or so nicely. When a person is attacking i tend to be defensive, but then again most people do. But I get it... and i get your point.

Actually, as I explained before, your careless wording implied something other than what you now claim to have meant. I simply couldn't let that slight against the rest of us go unpunished.


Although i do understand where you are coming from and i understand you angle at this and so i have to agree that in your case there is room for resentment when it comes to Bizzaro.

Oh, I resent him for more than that. I resent that fact that since the day he joined this forum, he has been a paragon of nearly everything that I find wrong with the community.


But that doesn't mean that when another decides that they like him that you can attack them. That Is Just Rude. But i don't know why i'm trying to explain this to you because i doubt you really care. So really there is no more need to try and explain myself to you now is there?

You'll find that a lot of people around here don't care if they're being rude. Many of us prefer to tell it like it is, regardless of whose feelings we may hurt. You might call it the battle line drawn between the adult members of the site and the kids who want to turn it into their little sandbox.


Oh and Way not to be rude with that last post!:-D I am proud of you and i know if you can be that nice with that post and maybe a little less sarcastic you could be a nice person.:-D

Don't you ever wish such a cruel fate upon me. :(

I haven't spent years cultivating my sarcasm skills to cast them aside now.


BTW, considering that i just joined this site nice meeting you Prak.

As I've been moderately entertained by this exchange, I can honestly say that it is mutual. Just remember the lessons learned here. FFS isn't like most other forums you'll find. Almost anything goes in this place and people won't sugar-coat the truth to make it easier for you to take. If you accept it as it is, you may come to love the community. If you try to change it or post here out of spite for it (as BS seems to do), you're in for a long, difficult, and ultimately futile battle that can only end in humiliation.

Yo BizarroSephiroth, can you please continue your poem?

I like poetry but this thread is annoying. Why did Prak have to come in and start arguing? Really it doesnt make sense. Oh well.
Toodles.

Did you not read a word of what he said?

Reading and Comprehension are two different things, Bryan. I thought you knew that, silly. :-P

Lol, Alright Prak.
Point understood
I'm kinda Bored with it now,
AWYL

Okely dokely lets cover everything here.

First off i would like to thank *Angel* for not being an ass about it like everyone else was. People have different tastes in literature, as she had said, and obviously Prak, if you don't have a taste for literature such as this, get the hell out of here. Please.

I do poetry for the fact that i like writing, not to gain any type of self-respect. I just like to know whether or not, truly, if people actually like it, and if so or if not, if i can improve in any way whatsoever. It seems though, Prak, that you hate EVERYTHING certain people such as myself do, just for the sake of not liking that person because they are, "young" or, "different". If you had actually read it, and if you had a poetic taste, i don't care whether or not you like it or not, just don't goddamn rant about it for a page and a half's worth of words

I am nice when i want to be. But if people hate me for a extremely stupid reason such as Praks, i will hate them back. I try to be as nice as i can, and that is usually 95% of the time. But that other 5% comes out of people hating me just because they want to have someone they can hate and make fun of.

I obviously noticed only a select few of you liked them, and for that i say thank you. People who didn't like them, those of you who are not being complete assholes about it, thank you. As for you Prak, back the fuck off if you really don't care. Let poetry be for the poetic

You are an ass Prak. That's all i can say. Stop f'ing up the threads i make. I just made this because i felt like sharing my poetic intellect that only about 5 people realized.

I just made this because i felt like sharing my poetic intellect that only about 5 people realized.

Ever wonder WHY only 5 people thought it was any good?

Also, calling your thread 'Half you people suck etc etc' isn't a good starting point.

Oh BS (such an apt abbreviation!), your idiocy never fails to bring a smile to my face.

Ever wonder WHY only 5 people thought it was any good?

Also, calling your thread 'Half you people suck etc etc' isn't a good starting point.

I don't give a fuck about the fact it was only five people. Id appreciate one, just knowing people gave a fuck about goddamn literature. I like it. Some others do too. I am happy. You people just fuck everything up, so...........

just fuck off.

hahaha, keep on having a coronary please

You kids play nice..

I don't give a fuck about the fact it was only five people. Id appreciate one, just knowing people gave a fuck about goddamn literature. I like it. Some others do too. I am happy. You people just fuck everything up, so...........

Simply because I want to be ranted at as well, the questions that beg to be asked are as follows:

Why are you ranting about "the rest of us" when you've found that one person who apparently appreciates your poetry?

and...

How did these "people just fuck everything up," as you so poetically put it? Your poems are still here. You have your, uh, fan. Or two.

Well i'm probably not the best qualified person in here to make a post about everything thats right and wrong with the poetry in order to give full constructive critiscm due to my limited knowledge on the subject, but will add some comments:

@ BizarroSephiroth

The impression I get from the poems you posted are just expressions of emotions that you've personally felt in different situations, although pls correct me if i'm wrong there.

However assuming that you choose at the time to type your own personal emotions from your own point of view/experiences onto the internet in the format of a poem with the hopes of it being perceived by others as being good (i'm not talking about it being likable but of being of good writing quality which i'm assuming is something you want to achieve in your work given that you've posted it here) then you do need to bear in mind that such an approach to your work is setting yourself up for critiscm as that does not make good poetry. While such feelings might have alot of meaning for you it's unrealistic to assume that it's going to be just as meaningful to everyone else that reads it I'm not saying that emotions shouldn't be expressed in a poem but there should be a deeper meaning to the whole poem than just being an emotional vent for the person who wrote it.

A balance has to be achieved between what the writer is interested in and what the reader is. A readers expectation of reading a poem will be to read about an experience that tells them something original. Putting this as politely as I can the poems you have written and posted here currently contain none of that hence the critiscm you are receiving.

However there's no reason that you shouldn't improve and write good poetry in the future, so long as you can accept the fact that at this stage your poems do need alot of working on. My advice to you would be to do some research into what makes good and bad poetry, to read as much as both as you can in order to make your own observations, how to make use of better writing techniques in your work and to keep on practicing as much as possible. So long as you bear in mind how it is you need to improve, and are genuine about taking action to do so then your work will get better as a result of what you learn. Everyone at the end of the day has to begin somewhere, and you can only get better with practice.

However in order to progress beyond the beginner stage you do need to accept, at least if you genuinely want your work to be good and published one day, that to start with your work will have faults and that people will point them out to you and at times will be blunt. The best way to think of it, if you want to get better, is consider what you can learn from whats been said (however harshly it's put) and disregard the rest. Refusal to accept anything at all thats been said however will get in the way of your progress as that way you are denying yourself the opportunity to learn and as a result get better.

BS, the next poem please, just continue and take all comments as positive as you could

i appreciate your poem

i already say its ok...
how you make them
can we share or poems too...
and can you make poem for games
like ff games and KH-2 like that...

I don't give a fuck about the fact it was only five people. Id appreciate one, just knowing people gave a fuck about goddamn literature. I like it. Some others do too. I am happy. You people just fuck everything up, so...........

just fuck off.

My God! I got banned for less!

Anyway!

And the only reason most of us suck is because your peotry is too stupidfyingly rediculous for most of us to even give a shit about you. Please don't blame us for hating you.

Stupidfyingly? LOL that was a joke...Right?

My God! I got banned for less!

Anyway!

And the only reason most of us suck is because your peotry is too stupidfyingly rediculous for most of us to even give a shit about you. Please don't blame us for hating you.

You should get banned again for being such an ass.
You can't even spell Ridiculous or poetry.
And your talking about someone else... :mad:
Shut up and GTFO.

You should get banned again for being such an ass.
You can't even spell Ridiculous or poetry.
And your talking about someone else... :mad:
Shut up and GTFO.

Didn't you call Prak out for "rudeness" just last page? Contradiction much?

You should get banned again for being such an ass.
You can't even spell Ridiculous or poetry.
And your talking about someone else... :mad:
Shut up and GTFO.

Bite me. I was trying to finish up so I could go home. Don't like my speed spelling, you can ram it up your.. Oh my. Sorry, I shouldn't talk to kids like that. And by the way, What you said was far worse than what I said. So next time you decide to try to scold someone about being rude, don't try to one up them in being an asshole. You're making yourself out to be a hypocrite.

...LOLin'

Bite me. I was trying to finish up so I could go home. Don't like my speed spelling, you can ram it up your.. Oh my. Sorry, I shouldn't talk to kids like that. And by the way, What you said was far worse than what I said. So next time you decide to try to scold someone about being rude, don't try to one up them in being an asshole. You're making yourself out to be a hypocrite.

If you want to get banned tell someone. Go Home Please
And the way i scold people is my buisness and if i get banned for it well to bad...
Anyway what i said was true, you come back and the first thing you do is be an ass well my first inclination is to tell you about it.
Sorry if you didn't like it, but people are now trying to help bizzaro and his poetry and you are just unnesisary here.
And Plus you didin't spell those words right and you obviously have no positive input for this thread so once again STFU and GTFO.

And biting you might leave a bad taste in my mouth so no thankyou

And Plus you didin't spell those words right and you obviously have no positive input for this thread so once again STFU and GTFO.


unnesisary

Scolding folks for their spelling is quite unnecessary. Also, my previous post still stands.

i called prak out because he just starts off by being rude as you did...
i was asking him to be nicer and that was that...

However we had all just gotten to a point of peace and you come in being an ass... me telling you about it is not rude, it is the truth.

If by "point of peace," you mean nobody's posted, then you're absolutely correct. Now, compared to your repeated ZOMG U SUXXORS STFU GTFO rants, how am I being so rude? Double standard much?

I think probably Angel meant my post, as I was trying my best to make some constructive critiscm towards Bizarro so that he'd realise why his poetry was being commented on as it was, as well as the replies of a couple of others after me.

Still doesn't look to me like he wants to reply any further in here, so guess it's not worth me making any further comment at this stage. Still should he decide to reply further to my post then I will do.

...LOLin'

Giga, you're like a calming influence among all the insanity.

you should post more. ;_;;;;

lol thanks. :laugh: =)

If I had the time I'd be happy to but don't get all that much of a chance to come on the internet at work during the day right now unfortunatley :(

You guys do realize that you're argueing about peotry, with a young girl.

Not meaning any offence but it's pretty hard to know somebody's age unless they share that information with you on an internet forum.

Also, harsh as this might sound, every member on here is responsible for how they present their posts no matter what their age. Should they choose to post something negative about a post that somebody else has made, it's hardly suprising if people choose to respond to that negatively.

All my poems, every last one.

I Feel Something Special: A *special* poem by BizarroSephiroth

I grasp a special feeling
Inside of me
A feeling i have something
Who will be
My love
Forever

This is honesty boring. Rhyming 'feeling' and 'something' is juvenile to me. Anyone could do that. Not to mention you repeated the word feeling twice in three lines which if you can't find a better way to say it, then either you suck at this, or you're simply not trying very hard. OK, so you have 'something' that will be your love forever. I haven't read the rest of this yet, but I will say that if it's a person, you need to give this a second look. Normally, I would never read past this but the fact that you call your poetry 'intellectual' is an abomination to great poets out there.

A new day comes, and i still can feel it
Warm sun all around
Shining on my eyes
I feel in love now, but what can i say
I feel a special feeling
In me

OK, so wait, you're in love with a 'thing'? And where did this new day come from? You never even specified a particular point in time. And yet again, you're basically saying the same thing. Warm sun all around... wow, original. I've never seen someone say that warm sun is shining on one's eyes. Again, just so original (sarcasm). But apparently, that special feeling is just there... in you. How profound...

I see the sunset
Blood-red sky
I stay with her and watch the darkness
Rise into her eyes
And when i see the starlight
I wish upon a star
That you'll be in love forever
Enduring
On and on

I don't mind switches in stanza length or style, but, the switches SHOULD be consistent for cadence reasons. Also, the syllables should be semi-similar per line. Darkness rising into her eyes is a contradiction to the rest of the whole poem, with 'it' or 'her' (not really sure anymore) being the love of you life, giving you a special feeling of some sort. If she's such a great life, then why even say something so contradictory as watching darkness rise into her eyes? Ok, so you are in love with this person or thing, but you want it or her to be in love forever... Be in love with who? Dont' you want it/her to be in love with you? Also, enduring on and on is a pointless fucking end to that stanza because you just said that by saying "you'll be in love forever." Repeating yourself for the sake of lengthening a stanza means you're a moron and just can't think up anything better.

Time passes quickly and its morningrise
Love strikes me with awe
Once again i wait out the day
Until i see her
Shining bright
In the warmth
Of the new daylight

The word is MORNING. So-called 'poetic' language adds nothing to this. How can the love be striking you with awe when you've known about this feeling already? And now you want her shining bright again as opposed to 'darkness rising in her eyes'. Is she evil at night now, but really cool during the day, but you love her either way? C'MON! Actually, this verse was probably the least annoying thus far. Still not good though.

But one day i find she's gone
I cry my heart out
That sense of love is gone
But i must find her again

And now we're going with four lines? OK, she's suddenly gone after you've spent four stanzas analyzing two days when your feelings have been exactly the same, just repeating yourself over and over again, with a contradictory line stuck in between. You just spring this onto us expecting there to be some sense to it.

I see her lying on a bed
I cannot see the wound
Until i stare straight down at her
And lean right next to her

The last two lines here are an abomination. Ending 2 lines in a row with the same damn word is simply weak. OK, now she suddenly has a wound? How the hell did she get this wound? Where did she go? What was she into that caused this? And if you're staring straight down at her, there's a good shot you're right next to her. Yet another extra pointless line just to extend the stanza to make it four lines.

Blood is racing out of her
The doctors try their best
They want me out
But I won't leave
I want to stay by you

Gee, can't imagine what happens now...

Eventually they force me out
But i leave with one last kiss
I leave her room
Eventually the hospital
But a miracle comes

HAHAHA, the obvious miracle. This whole stanza's just awkward. Who talks like this? "I leave her room... eventually the hospital"... WTF? There are more holes here than in the golf courses in Caddyshack.

She runs straight through my door
I run and pick her up and show her
I love her
And she shows me
That same affection
We had under the stars

There was ONE fucking stanza dealing with being under the stars and that is how you choose to end this, at best, incredibly mediocre poem. Honestly, this is horrid. There is no smooth cadence at all, no consistencies other than each stanza being horrid. What I can't figure out is why you'd think this is good, and why anyone else would think this is good. It must be because it sounds pretty to the naked untrained fucked up eye.


Who still thinks this poem is good? I can do the rest too if you all want, so you people can actually learn about what decent poetry is.

Who still thinks this poem is good? I can do the rest too if you all want, so you people can actually learn about what decent poetry is.

Get em.

My gosh, I love your poetry! I'm a published poet(I usually do freeform and get published in various places,magazines,books,etc...), and love to write to express my feelings, so I sympathize with you on a ton of your points adrressed in your poems. Your ability to be down to earth in your poetry is amazing and simply inspiring. Most of my poetry relies on the reader digging deeper, and thus somewhat confusing them lol so I admire your ability to pound out your feelings and opinions without concealing a drop of emotion. Keep writing and maybe you'll be published next to me one day ^^ I'd like to see your poems compliment my own.

I really love Poetry;but your words,your style just doesn't match with poems.Your poems are like Emo Song Lyrics and that stuff.I mean where is the rhyme,where is the emotion?Your words are simple.Words used in poems should have deeper meanings.Just advice.

Hi, welcome to 1 1/2 years ago.

Don't do this again, please.

yeah hey don't respond to revived threads guys thanks ; ;