shade17
06-09-2005, 02:31 PM
its down there,
what i rush towards,
whatever it is,
grabbing at the passing air,
.................................................. .,
SPLAT.

that was terrible. so hows about something comical....
............................

jack and jill,
went up the hill,
to do a little kissing,
jack made a pass,
and grabbed jills ass,
and his two front teeth are now missing....

please tell me what you think
Dragoncurry
06-10-2005, 04:31 AM
and his two front teeth are now missing....

This sentence doesn't flow.
Gaffelmannen
06-10-2005, 04:46 PM
Okay, I guess, but as Dragoncurry said, that last sentence doesn't flow.
shade17
06-10-2005, 04:59 PM
DOES IT HAVE TO, i'm sure you've heard of poetic licensing.
Rapture
06-11-2005, 01:14 PM
What the fuck. :(
shade17
06-11-2005, 06:13 PM
poetic licensing. it like freedom of speech for writers.
Dragoncurry
06-12-2005, 03:56 AM
It's also called writing shitty last lines that don't sell. It wasn't even funny. Cause I understand that you are joking but this is so NOT funny...it isn't even funny.
lenneth
06-12-2005, 05:00 AM
OH MAN YOU WROTE A FAKE SILLY POEM LOL THAT IS SO FUNNY YOU ARE LIKE MAKING FUN OF OTHER POEMS BY WRITING ONE YOURSELF LOL THATS GREAT YOU ARE THE FUNNIEST GUY ON THE SHRINE
Dragoncurry
06-12-2005, 03:24 PM
Hahaha
mrmonkeyman
06-12-2005, 04:48 PM
OH MAN YOU WROTE A FAKE SILLY POEM LOL THAT IS SO FUNNY YOU ARE LIKE MAKING FUN OF OTHER POEMS BY WRITING ONE YOURSELF LOL THATS GREAT YOU ARE THE FUNNIEST GUY ON THE SHRINE
neosavedtheworld
06-12-2005, 08:55 PM
Shade17 don't be that guy...