Bus Driver
03-08-2005, 01:58 PM
Sunset
An orange aura overcomes the land
A gentle breeze still wisps across the trees
A day so beautiful will end

I will walk this path
The white sand is the road to destiny
The breeze can no longer keep me here
I must go now

The sun shall disappear beyond the horizon
The light can no longer guide me
A day so beautiful is ending
I will go now

The sun has left me behind
The air has become still
A day so beautiful has ended
I have gone

chewey
03-08-2005, 02:04 PM
i wonder if anybody will ever write a poem and not trying to sound passionate...
Like, I ran, then i saw a dog, woof said he... I ran. NOW THATS A POEM!

Dragoncurry
03-19-2005, 03:36 AM
Hahaha. Cliche to the max. You got this from Kingdom Hearts didn't you?

Bus Driver
03-20-2005, 02:47 PM
No, I've never even played it. Its a simple poem about a person who feels as a beautiful day fades, he fades as well.

Saint
03-24-2005, 03:20 AM
I really have to agree with everyone else. Is this really about you? Or is it something you made up? For example, and person can't write about love 'less the person has been in love. If that's really how you feel, than that's fine, but it seems so artificial to me. But I DO like the imagery. I at least SAW the sun set.

Bus Driver
03-24-2005, 02:44 PM
Yes it is a poem about me from when I was young. The poem is about a boy who spent his day in appreciation of the marvels of nature (the gentle breeze, the sunshine, the trees). These very things were an escape from all his troubles, but as the day ends he realizes that he must return.

One_Winged_Angel
03-24-2005, 04:12 PM
I like it. Sorry for going against the rest of you guys, but it is pretty good. It reminds me of myself and how I wish to escape reality and be overwhelmed by a fantasy world.

Dragoncurry
03-25-2005, 05:42 PM
It reminds me of Kingdom Hearts.

kirea
03-25-2005, 06:16 PM
kirea:yeah i like it too! wish i could escape in a final fantasy world! It would have to be ff10-2 as yuna looks sorter like me,rikku is like my cousin full of energy and never shuts up! and paine is like my best friend quite cold hearted looking which she isn't.