I opened up an old book
To see if I could find peace
But the language was too clever
My understanding, it did cease

Cain and Abel were fighting
Over what I could not tell
In their faces I thought I saw
My mother's heaven and Dante�s hell

So I climbed to the peak of a mountain
To see if I would be able to see
Something greater than myself
But all I found was me

I was alone, but not by myself
I could not listen, but did hear
The drums beating loudly
And the band drawing near

The wind crashed and the waters rose
I cried out to the sky
And just about that moment
A familiar face floated by

It was Noah in his ark so large
Sailing past my wading feet
He said I�d love to help you, man
But I�m afraid we can�t find a seat

He just sailed on by as the waters climbed
And God just watched with glee
He must have thought it a clever joke
The one he played on me

As I was drowning in the torrent
My eyes opened and my senses came to me
I closed the book and bid farewell
To the mountain and the sea

I sat in my chair and was utterly confused
But looking back, it was only right
It somehow seems only fitting
That things not be so clear at night

I liked it. You've definitely got the Dylan style down alright. I especially like the part about Noah sailing by.

If I had to criticise, I'd say the rhythm could use a little work, some lines seem longer than most others, but nothing too bad. Good stuff.

Yeah, I didn't really think about that when I was writing. =/

Was okay. I really liked this stanza:



Cain and Abel were fighting
Over what I could not tell
In their faces I thought I saw
My mother's heaven and Dante�s hell


Lines like that are good stuff. You should put a guitar to it or something.

Hmm... Not bad. And I haven't said that about a poem at FFS for a while.

That was good. But this is gibberish:

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