hey, if you've got a poem, (nothing involving bad stuff in it)
then go ahead and post it. I'll display one of mine:
'From everyone in the world,
I never thought that you
would be one to hate,
just like they all do.'

Nice Haiku, atleast I hope it is! Her's mine:
Fish the moon from a river
Pull the sun from the sky,
Give me gold, just a sliver
Present me wings, for which to fly.

Or you could just stay here
Right here with me
And we'll go on living, nothing to fear
Together, everything we will see.

The moon could be your mind
Bright, logical and kind

The sun in the sky:
Your voice that would never lie

Gold, your precious metal
It's like you, it never rusts, It'll just settle

Wing that could fly
Like your heart, because when I see you, my heart is flying.


Well, It's not really that good, I wrote it when I was like 16, 11 years ago. Weird how I still have it!

Anyway, I love your little poem it was cute and so full of meaning.

Love Blaise
XXX O:]

Wow, yours was..... amazing. Thanks for the comment. ^_^
Here's another:
Though I try to be nice,
You push me away.
I lose more and more hope
every single day.

I actually wrote this for a girl at school. ^_^

really good dmglover2, ^_^

That's...not a haiku.


Though I try to be nice,
You push me away.
I lose more and more hope
every single day.
DO I NEED TO REPEAT MYSELF EVERY GODDAMN TOPIC.

Dude, you don't need to swear. :mad:

MMM, I know it sucks, but there's really nothing we can do to stop the little kids from shitting up this forum. Heaven forbid they should listen to anything we say, after all.

Dude, you don't need to swear. :mad:
I didn't swear.

Unless you actually think god or damn is a swearword.

If so, god damnit man.

MMM, I know it sucks, but there's really nothing we can do to stop the little kids from shitting up this forum. Heaven forbid they should listen to anything we say, after all.

You, PRAK, DON'T SWEAR ON MY THREAD!!!!!!!! >:O YOU LITTLE FART! >:O


MMM, I know it sucks, but there's really nothing we can do to stop the little kids from up this forum. Heaven forbid they should listen to anything we say, after all.

You, PRAK, DON'T SWEAR ON MY THREAD!!!!!!!! >:O YOU LITTLE FART! >:O

Little? Who's someone half my age to call me little?

And by the way, it ain't your thread because you don't pay for the bandwidth that hosts it.

hey, Here's my poem. I might call it ok for a poem. But Here it goes.

"Love"

It's funny how we found eachother
One lonely day
You were there, waiting for me
Under the stars in the night sky
I saw you there, wondering around
Walking that long path of darkness
You were the light for me to follow
There we lay under the stars
Two prints bound for love
Your eyes glistening back into mine
Across a flaming desert I would walk
Just to see your smile
The wind brushing against my face
Blinded by the sun
I still keep walking
In hope of finding you
I stare at the stars with tears running down my face
i loved you once....And I still do

I love final fantasy. It's had a great impact on my life. I can't wait for the future ones to come out.

Please tell me what you think of my poem. E-mail me at [email protected] or you can reply to me in the forums.

My first spoken word ep was called "Love, Life & Everything In Between" can I sue the starter of this thread? It might make me more money than the ep did...

AHHHH WHY DON'T ALL OF YOU CUT IT OUT! WHO CARES IF IT IS I HAIKU OR POEM OR WHATEVER AND STICK TO THE DAMN TOPIC!!!

Why don't you admin it, admin.

Diaries from the slave trade

Beneath this tin skyline I write to you broken but not defeated (Message in a bottle style).
The machines enjoy the power they have over the numb.
The computer tells me all the data I need to run the perfect life program.
The machines chant slogans of promotions and company advancement together in one emotionless drone.
The slaves tap at the keypads in sync to the beat of the drum.
The cameras follow and log your every movement.

A rage against this cooperate machine is futile.
The machines, they run your home,
You eat their slogans and you embody their mottos.
Work, eat and sleep to the beat of the drum, the robotic pied piper.

We need to be liberated!
I call for a revolution.
In the wake of the digital age we are being turned into the artificial intelligence.
We only know what they teach us, only what they tell us, only what they sell us, only what we buy.
The time has come for a new chapter.
The time has come to learn for ourselves.

That is one of mine. It was a bad day at work...hope you like it! :)

Read my sig mrmonkeyman

Read my sig mrmonkeyman
Some admin you are.

Hey, it's not my fault. What's wrong with you, can you not just even try to be in the least bit helpful. I'm sick of trying to be nice to you.

MORE FIGHTING! blaise, i support you. BUT STILL, I BELIEVE I HAVE HAD-

-ENOUGH IF THIS!

My first spoken word ep was called "Love, Life & Everything In Between" can I sue the starter of this thread? It might make me more money than the ep did...

Sorry, dude. I came up with this title myself. ^_^

If a picture's worth a thousand words how much more are a thousand words of love?

just a little something I came up with while I was sitting on my couch icing my knee

That was pretty good. Keep it up!

If a picture's worth a thousand words how much more are a thousand words of love?

just a little something I came up with while I was sitting on my couch icing my knee
That's awful.

Good one, mrmonkeyman! ^_^

haiku huh? heh... haven't heard that for a while anyways I'm not even sure why I bother to post again I guess ffshrine is pretty good when there's nothing else to do...well here's a little something


Over the passing time I've tried to written these poems in which my tears may flow with yours, But I know you've left, but I know I am alone, deep in bitter loneliness, without even a good dream, I lie, Trimming down the lighten lamp through the passing night...

Over the passing time I've tried to written these poems in which my tears may flow with yours, But I know you've left, but I know I am alone, deep in bitter loneliness, without even a good dream, I lie, Trimming down the lighten lamp through the passing night...


Oh! That was a good one, something to think about! ;)

Over the passing time I've tried to written these poems in which my tears may flow with yours, But I know you've left, but I know I am alone, deep in bitter loneliness, without even a good dream, I lie, Trimming down the lighten lamp through the passing night...
great poem i love it

But I know you've left, but I know I am alone, deep in bitter loneliness,

I keep stopping when you say the second "but". I do not know why but your poem is pretty decent. It is just that two buts do not sound right technically or poetically.

Dragon is right....But I know you've left and I know would do just fine...in my humble opinion. Good stuff though!

Reminds me distinctly of some songs by N' Sync and the Backstreet Boys...

well I was sort of tired that time when I wrote that well anyway here's another


I cannot sleep. The long night is full of bitterness. The shadows of the moon are so black in the night so deep, and profound.

I think you were sort of tired when you wrote this too. LOL

Yuki, you are very poetic..lol

well I was sort of tired that time when I wrote that well anyway here's another


I cannot sleep. The long night is full of bitterness. The shadows of the moon are so black in the night so deep, and profound.
and you are so full of shit :(

Don't pay attention to mr.monkeything, Yuki. He thinks he's funny or somthing. Anyway, I kinda like your style, but you should try not to write about such cliche things. Just know that anything, and I mean ANYTHING, could be art. Write about how you REALLY feel, no matter if it's about your dog dying or how much you like to shit or whatever, and not just to fit in a bunch of pretty words. Anyway, that's my advice. Don't stop writting just cause mr.monkeything might want you to.

It seems that I have heard your poem before. Many times. Saint is correct when you should write what you really feel. Here is basically what you did.

:Thinks of something that sounds poetic:

The mountain's air is like the leaves on a tree.

:Break up sentences so that they lose all poetic touch:

I sleep. Now. For ever. And ever. I sleep. Profoundly.


I cannot sleep. The long night is full of bitterness.

You cannot sleep because the long night is full of bitterness? Or you cannot sleep because the night is long?
Or these two sentences are pretty bad?


The shadows of the moon are so black in the night so deep, and profound.

"and so profound."

Your poem would have been SO much better if you wrote about how you couldn't sleep because your room was too hot or something.

What does the shadows in your poem have to do with ANYTHING? God.

Don't pay attention to mr.monkeything, Yuki. He thinks he's funny or somthing. Anyway, I kinda like your style, but you should try not to write about such cliche things. Just know that anything, and I mean ANYTHING, could be art. Write about how you REALLY feel, no matter if it's about your dog dying or how much you like to shit or whatever, and not just to fit in a bunch of pretty words. Anyway, that's my advice. Don't stop writting just cause mr.monkeything might want you to.
It wasn't a joke. It was a poor poem put together hastily, and she wanted complements not critique.

You didn't give a critique. You deliberately tried to insult her. That's completley unneccesary to prove your point, espacially when reffering to something personal, like poetry.

You didn't give a critique. You deliberately tried to insult her. That's completley unneccesary to prove your point, espacially when reffering to something personal, like poetry.
This wasn't personal. If it was personal it'd actually have any semblance of emotion beyond purely trying to gain attention. Don't give me that horseshit.

That's completley unneccesary to prove your point, espacially when reffering to something personal, like poetry.

I don't believe that this poem was very personal.

just nod and smile...nod and smile

Everyday, every night
I think of you alway.
Your attitude lately bothers me
I'm a fool for believing you were someone special
You've taken my love away, broken my heart...
On those days we meet, the time is vague
what were you doing when you said you forgot?
even your see-through lies are understandable, I can't hate you
When everything is been done, I just love you, anyways...
Everyone has wounds and dreams and immeasurable loneliness
you make so many mistakes, but that's what I love about you
even if the dream you once believed in is destroyed, you always smile.
Even sadness won't last forever, words that seem to echo out of your lips.
There are times when I can't hear anything from the noise of this city, but...A fragment of a small courage, a fragment of a small future
The road continues, if you just keep walking...
Leave those swaying feelings to the wind
Even if someday your life is burnt away, even if someday the world ends...you should always believe in yourself
Just close your eyes, the image of angels dancing in the light.
Don't ever forget, throught this world your heartbeat echoes, just open your eyes,
Light is spilling through a break in the clouds you're the one,
Even if you're confused by love,
Lost in a dream
Even if you feel like crying,
Cry your sadness,
but I will always hold you.

I think of you alway.

Gwahahahahha!!! (SPELLCHECKER!!!)


you make so many mistakes, but that's what I love about you

Gwahahhaha!!!...oh wait....wtf?!


Light is spilling through a break in the clouds you're the one,

The one?!?! THE ONE?! Dude I have no idea what the hell this poem is about because you didn't write it well. I am a fool for believing you were special (N SYNC style) and then you said in the last line I will alwasy hold on to you. So you are a fool. For writing something like this.

Gwahahahahha!!! (SPELLCHECKER!!!)



Gwahahhaha!!!...oh wait....wtf?!



The one?!?! THE ONE?! Dude I have no idea what the hell this poem is about because you didn't write it well. I am a fool for believing you were special (N SYNC style) and then you said in the last line I will alwasy hold on to you. So you are a fool. For writing something like this.
a friend wrote it ya dope. Anyways you didn't spell "always" right...before you start on flaming on someone make sure you do it right.

Okay, thanks for pointing out my mistake. That still doesn't change the fact that the poem can be written about something other than LOVE? Doesn't anyone get tired of that topic?!

That is true...love is beginning to be a bore,but I suppose I'll write a dark poem from now on. Anyways I have nothing against love. But I personally am tired of love so much

ooooh dark poems are cool.
Here is one. Its NOT MINE I repeat NOT mine. Its a friends but I love it, its one of my fav's of his.

=Ongoing Nightmare=-

Knife slices through flesh, exposing it to light.
Not a cry nor moan is heard against the pale night.
Morning light soon comes creeping over the window sill,
Exposing your angelic body, lifeless and still.
The door did not open, there was no reply to my call,
For in a hail of emotion, you had ended it all.
In my state of fear, the door gives way.
Never ever have I felt so afraid.
I found you, lying where you had ended your life.
But next to you, stood myself with the knife.
Still trickling with blood, my other licks the knife dry,
The Devil's smile painted on his face... why did I let her die?

Everything goes black... then I wake from my hell,
And hold you close, thanking the stars that all is well.
But your body is cold, unlike the warmth I adore.
Blood has stained the sheets, the pain is more intense than before.
For I have found the knife in my hands, fresh from the kill,
As sunlight had begun to peer over the window sill.
The door opens wide, and there I see...
A horrified, confused copy of me.
Seeing us together, he began to cry,
and shouted, "Why... why did he let her die!?"

Why... why did I let her die?
Why... oh why wouldn't she let me die?

I thought that we were more than the closest of friends,
But this nightmare says otherwise... it won't ever end.

AH SB I know that poem. Its by Chris. I know who its too aswell. You wanna know? PM me if you do.
I guess I should start my new poem too.
Death, Pain, Sadness go hand in hand with the thing called Love.
Thats will I have so far. I dont wanna write a dark one again. But I promised someone I would write one for them.
Why oh why dont I just say no. Oh thats right I cant. Not to friends. *smiles*

Your poems are really great shadow, well maybe better than me

It won't ever end?
Great work there chief.

Seriously, Don't write poetry from Japanese Animations.

Seriously, Don't write poetry from Japanese Animations.
that's true it'll be stealing someone's else's work

Your poems are really great shadow, well maybe better than menah they arent. Havent you seen my thread with my poems. No one likes them. Thats way I stopped writing. Well stopped here. I dont post what people are just going to say are bad cause its not what they would write. If they gave a reason why it wasnt good then I would fix it but they just mock them and/or change it around to make a rape poem.

you shouldn't care what people say about your work. What matters is that you did your best on it and feel good writing it in the first place. You shouldn't let people effect you in a way that you are discourage to write more. Trully I think your poems are really good, and I think you should keep writing

When the hell did you fix anthing?! You just kept posting your poems and they were all about the same thing. We told you that a hundred times. They are nice..but they are the same; go check page two of your thread.

And he made it into a rape poem just to make it interesting. Honestly, your word choice confused the hellll out of all of us and we all got bored of reading about DARKNESS. It isn't like we told you to stop writing. Just to fix what you did, not post more retarded shit.

It is people like Jiro why people don't improve. "If you feel good about it, then its good."
Yeah okay. Great mind set. Lets improve by thinking it is good when it's not.

ok Dragoncurry here where is a poem that isnt darkness. (wow I have a poem thats nice)

Look at the stars, tell what you see.
I see what should be me.
Stars may fall and disappear,
But they don't weep or moan,
They keep shining bright as can be,
Or even at a glow.
You may have disappear,
But I am like the stars,
I keep on shining,
Even if its hard.

ahh.. poetry eh. i think you need a blast of beatiful poetry! ill send a couple. this first one is titled; i imagined you by choice
I wrote this poem a couple of years ago and ive modifyed it a couple of times as ive learnt better grammer and english :-P here it is:

I thought I saw you coming,
I thought I heard your voice,
I wanted you so bad,
So I imagined you by choice,

You came through the window,
You drifted through the glass,
Your footsteps were silent,
Each one as quiet as the last,

The door opened with a creak,
There was no-one there,
I wished that you would come to life,
Upon your face that I would stare,

The glass would have broken,
Your footsteps would make noise,
You would stare at me in the doorway,
But I imagined you by choice.

and heres numba 2:

My wrist is bleeding
I�m in great pain
But I continue cutting, all the same

My throat is burning
I feel insane
But I keep on drinking the bleach for the drain.

My neck is breaking
I�m going red
But I�ve tightened the rope, it can�t escape my head

I cannot breath
My clothes are wet
But I can�t float back, till my ends have met

My chest is throbbing
I need some help
But could I tell them �I stabbed myself�?


And number 3:

No one took notice,
that he was alone,
no one cared,
that he was on his own.

He did not smile,
though he did not frown,
he did not hear them,
when they made a sound.

He did not walk,
he did not run,
he did not play games,
he did not have fun.

He made a promise,
that he would love life,
he broke that promise,
with a sharpened knife.


and thats all my poems that i want to share :-P if any one wants more of my work then PM me or ask me on this thread :b

nice

who likes my poetry? :-P

no one

i see

it's good actually

thx jiro.... MOSESDALLAMA!!!

I like your poetry too, here's some poems I wrote....(they were made a while ago...so yeah)
btw..one of them doesn't rhyme

I watch you, megalomaniacle
Seething, breathing in your soul
Leaving you fatuated
You cannot see, what's palpable to me
For your mind and heart
Are cold as stone,
Calcified by time
Leaving clostrophobic scars
Remembering forever
And rapturous tears cease(sp?) to exist
Festered by nothing
Slowly growing negligent
As you evaporate in your unrequited love

another one

Half-parted lips, so full and tendor
Fill me with bliss in their splendor
Taunting and teasing me with their grace
The feeling of raw need flash across my face

Your fingers so slender as they entwine with mine
Fire turns to water and blood to wine
Your deep red eyes so filled with lust
The rich ebony hair, you are a must

The black satin sheets, a sea of pleasure
Feeling your body fills my heart up with tip top measure
And as you tug playfully at my little white dress
I drown in your love and your ever so sweet caress


Do you like?

the 1st one seems like you just used random fancy words from the thesaurus and threw them in. the (sp?) really added to that.

Oddly enough, the (sp?) was on one of the very few words spelled correctly.

tendor rofl

thanks

np 8-)

there really good! but i think they'd be better off as songs.. maybe you should write some songs instead of poetry? im not sayin yoru poetry is bad :-P just your style seems more suited for songwriting

Long words don't make you smarter ;(

Leaving clostrophobic scars
Remembering forever

that part was really deep

Long words don't make you smarter ;(

was that to me?