My little sis wrote this. I call her the sparkly-elf. Check out her pic on the Internet stalkers material thread, page 42.

Plastic chairs.
You would never tell with such grace,
The young adolecent sitting comfortably in the plastic chairs.
He taps his feet, staring into space,
While his friends walk around the room.

He shrugs and flicks his dark hair away from his eyes.
How could one, or any girl not stare,
The beautiful face, the one that tells such lies
Of love and lust, a girl get's sick of constant sin.

A rose amoung weeds, sweet, beautiful,
Loved by all.
But even roses have thorns, sharp despite how fruitful
That prick and pinch at barely healed wounds
Of a love long lost that bleeds anew.
Remembers the acts of heartbreak and bleeds
So much, the pain of love and lust coloured red,
Red... like a rose, the rose that sits on plastic chairs,
And flicks his dark hair away from his eyes.


She said that the plastic chairs were the chairs they have in her school, incase you don't know what it means.

Love Blaise.
XXX O:]

ickle?

ickle?
Little, it's sort of a pet name type of thing. Ickle, my mum says it alot, ???

The young adolecent sitting comfortably in the plastic chairs.


This is a sarcastic comment right? those school chairs were never comfortable :(

apart from that it's pretty good, tell your sis to keep it up :-D

Holy shit, a poem that doesn't rhyme.

...oh wait.

Red like a rose? Oh please. Why doesn't someone compare red to, say, a kitkat wrapper, or a london bus, or anything other than BLOOD OR ROSES.

NGHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.

Holy shit, a poem that doesn't rhyme.

...oh wait.

Red like a rose? Oh please. Why doesn't someone compare red to, say, a kitkat wrapper, or a london bus, or anything other than BLOOD OR ROSES.

NGHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.

Say what you want, I thought it sounded cool. Yesterday she won an award for English because of that poem in her school. I'm so proud *wipes away a tear*.

Love Blaise.
XXX O:]

Cool, she won an award with it, thats fantastic! :-D

Red... like a kit-kat wrapper, the kit-kat wrapper that sits on plastic chairs,
Red... like a London bus, the London bus that sits on plastic chairs
Red... like a tomato, the tomato that sits on plastic chairs

hmm doesn't have the same ring to it, does it MMM?

hey, Blaise, nice job. I uuuuuuuh....... hope you don't mind me asking, nothing personal, but are you....... british? I mean, british folk say mum and ickle and other british lingo. Again, no offense. Hey, you can check out the thread titled 'Poems: Love, hate, and everything in between' started by me. ^_^ Feedback appreciated! ^_^

my sis already out of the house she is 22.

hey, Blaise, nice job. I uuuuuuuh....... hope you don't mind me asking, nothing personal, but are you....... british? I mean, british folk say mum and ickle and other british lingo. Again, no offense. Hey, you can check out the thread titled 'Poems: Love, hate, and everything in between' started by me. ^_^ Feedback appreciated! ^_^
Nope, but I wouldn't mind. I'll reply to your poem in a sec, I haven't read it yet. Thanks, my sis is beaming because she's had mostly (mrmonkeyman's reply isn't what you'd call nice) nice replys. Thanks everyone! Oh and Cid Highwind, what are talking about. My sis is 15.

Love Blaise
XXX O:]

Oh kool *Feels like a fool* well umm.

hey, guys except mr monkeyman. I gotta say something:
Why o why is mrmonkeyman gay?
He's gay, he's gay, gay gay gay gay gay gay gay. ^_^
I was dared by somebody, dude. Don't get mad. ^_^

hey, guys except mr monkeyman. I gotta say something:
Why o why is mrmonkeyman gay?
He's gay, he's gay, gay gay gay gay gay gay gay. ^_^
I was dared by somebody, dude. Don't get mad. ^_^
So a homophobe jumped on here? Or maybe that was from you?
I'm not mad. I'm more bemused. I mean, that's not even lame :(

I really was dared to do it. TRIPLE DOG DARED, I MIGHT ADD.

This new daring stuff is really quite retarded. Especially when its done by a bunch of 13 year olds who think its fun to call people gay and think its a huge deal to go out and say they are gay, even if they're just joking.

Seriously, if you're going to do truth or dare, at least do something that's actually DARING. Grow up.

This new daring stuff is really quite retarded. Especially when its done by a bunch of 13 year olds who think its fun to call people gay and think its a huge deal to go out and say they are gay, even if they're just joking.

Seriously, if you're going to do truth or dare, at least do something that's actually DARING. Grow up.

Look, Cassie, I'm not 13. Besides, i only like TorD because I can make them do emmbarrassing stuff!

You're acting like you're 13, or maybe younger. If you want to be liked/respected/etc on this forum, act your age.

I AM acting my age. But hey, After the morning, I'm usually better then this. believe it or not, I actually didn't want to do that dare. i respect mrmonkeyman, even though he does RUIN EVERY THREAD.

He doesn't ruin every thread, he actually criticises people, maybe a little harshly in some people's eyes, but still it's infinitely more useful than all you people who say everything's great just to up your post-count a bit.

Now, if you're quite done with your playground triple-daring can we get back to the poem ?

As Vyvyan said, I give a critique, though an embittered, angry critique, on everything.

A lot of people seem to put no effort into what they're writing and don't put anymore in when they're told "WOW THAT'S AMAZING" when it's actually grade A tripe.

So, in my own special way, I'm doing a service.

Well, mrmonkeyman, with ALL DUE RESPECT, you actually tear down people more than you help. Trust me, i was a bully in kindergarten. i've been picked on since second grade. Every time I tried to nice, they tore me down. Every time i fought back, they tore my sorry little weak, stupid, retarded butt down. And don't go trying to say I'm not any of those things, because it won't change anything.

Can you PLEASE take this into a PM? I hate when people linger away from topics .. especially in fiction and poetry forums.

Tell me about it, dude. I HATE THAT!

You aren't helping. Stop posting, please.

Well, mrmonkeyman, with ALL DUE RESPECT, you actually tear down people more than you help. Trust me, i was a bully in kindergarten.

Wait a few more years before you try persuading people with your life experiences.

"tear people down"... my my, aren't we a bit on the dramatic side dmglver2? some people say honesty is a virtue, i myself enjoy mrmonkeyman's criticisms, while everyone else sucks some 12 year old's balls cause of some stick figure picture he/she drew using mud and feaces, he reminds us of exactly how shit some of the art and fiction is on this site... and i always find it amusing

Well, aren't we cocky today?! Well, mr.patterson, if you're such a good artist, why don't you post some of your work? Huh? I bet I can draw two times better than you.

bitch, i'm cocky everyday and where the fuck in my post did it even hint at the fact that i'm an artist?