I always wanted this


Tifa and Aeris encounter each other.

Aeris: you!!! You took Cloud away from me!!!

Tifa: Whatever it was you who pushed him away.

Aeris: That's it *Whacks Tifa outside the head with her staff*

Tifa: OWWW

Tifa throws a punch at Aeris but aeris ducks and jabs her in the chest with her staff. Then Aeris jumps back and aims a thunder spell at Tifa but she somersaults out of the way.

Tifa: Loser hahaha!

Aeris: Grr.....

Tifa takes out a Red materia

Tifa: Tera Flare!!!

Bahamut ZERO comes out of nowhere and blasts Aeris hard. Aeri survives with a little blood stain on her shoulder.

Aeris: Ugh....

Tifa somersaults right in front of Aeris then jabs Aeris in the stomach and then kicks Aeris backwards 2 or 3 feet.

Aeris: Owie!

Aeris takes out a re materia also

Aeris: Gunge Lance!

Odin slashes Tifa giving her a major cut on her stomach. Before Tifa could react Aeris blasts her with a thunder materia.

Tifa:aaaaah

Aeris:Haha who is laughing now?

Tifa: Me Final Heathen!!!

Tifa knocks Aeris way far back. Both girls have major wounds.

Aeris/Tifa: huff....puff.....THUNDER FIRE ICE!!!

3 spells from two sides collide. Who will Survive?


That should be the crowd's decision go ahead vote i'll check who the winner is in 1 or 2 days

WHY.
MAKE IT STOP, PLEASE, GOD. MAKE IT STOP.

THANKS FOR MAKING A THREAD ABOUT IT!

Cloudmeister, are you saying I wrote all this (http://forums.ffshrine.org/showthread.php?s=&threadid=17334) for absolutely nothing?! :mad:


Please stop cluttering these forums with such... written... things.

Originally posted by Tokiko
Cloudmeister, are you saying I wrote all this (http://forums.ffshrine.org/showthread.php?s=&threadid=17334) for absolutely nothing?! :mad:

I dunno about him, but I sure am.

I vote Tifa!

I'm somwhere in between sighing and laughing and this one.

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I CANNOT BELIEVE I JUST READ THAT! That was a mixture between funny and strange. You're making them sound like they're mentally challenged

Originally posted by mrmonkeyman
WHY.
MAKE IT STOP, PLEASE, GOD. MAKE IT STOP.

The somke clears showing Tifa is the victor.

Tifa: Oh yea look at me Aeris look at me I won!!!

Aeris: .......



Tifa---1
Aeris---0

Sry couldn't help it nobody posted anything about these chicks fighting so i gave you some action.

And no All you said Tokito was not for nothing i just couldn't resist. Besides i'm halfway done with my real story so calm down take a chill pill

If real women ever got this violent over a guy -- a guy like Cloud Strife, no less -- the whole world would lose cool points.

I saw a cat fight at school. Two redneck girls fighting over a redneck boy one of them supposedly fucked, while the other was dating him. It was gr8 :D

If real women ever got this violent over a guy -- a guy like Cloud Strife, no less -- the whole world would lose cool points.

The real world probably loses cool points daily because of this.


And I never saw any girl fights in school. Apparently they were quite the shows though, because the girls would always try and tear each other's shirts off, or that's how it was described in the legends. =\

Tifa: Me Final Heathen!!!

Well I'm certainly glad she's the final heathen. I'm so glad the world will be all [Roman Catholic/Muslim] after she is gone!

As you said in another thread, you got a C- in English.

I suggest your English teacher be shot for passing you at all.

Look, it's perfectly fine to have a healthy imagination - but you have to find how to express it. If you didn't know how to draw, would you create a comic? No. Because it's a form of art. And English, the ability to write, is also an art.

If you're going to get upset when people criticize your work, look around - there are examples in this very forum of people who are skilled at writing fan-fiction, becase they understand the concepts of the English language.

I mean, look at Tokiko - her native language is German, and she can write better than you.

Perhaps you have another outlet for your talents - find a form of expression that you are talented in, be it music, drawing, painting, or something along those lines, and express yourself that way. Or, if you're determined to express yourself through writing, than work on your technique before presenting it to the world.

:notgood: :notgood: :notgood:

STFU your not the boss of me I said i'll stop till a great idea pops up in my head. And stop saying what i'm good and bad at it's none of your beeswax.

:mad:

If you don't want the opinions of others posted about your writing, you shouldn't post it in here.

If you don't want the opinions of others posted about your writing, you shouldn't post it in here.

sign'd and seal'd

I am........forever..........corrupted..... :confused:

Bahamut ZERO comes out of nowhere and blasts Aeris hard. Aeri survives with a little blood stain on her shoulder.

I feel used. :(

I don't understand that people always want to see fights between Tifa and Aeris. It doesn't make sense at all.... :(

But if they had to fight, Aeris would probably win, because she can use "seal evil" and heal herself. Tifa can't.... ;)


Originally Posted by Bahamut Zero

I feel used. :(
:laugh:

your not the boss of me

That's right, mom. The fic might suck but I took a shit in the cornflakes, whatcha gonna do?

STEP OFF STEP OFF STEP OFF STEP OFF

:notgood: :notgood: :notgood:

STFU your not the boss of me I said i'll stop till a great idea pops up in my head. And stop saying what i'm good and bad at it's none of your beeswax.

:mad:Alright, shitstain. Yeah, it is my business, because I make it my business, and you made it my business by posting here. Or should I say my beeswax. Either way, no, you can STFU, you untalented, illiterate mongoloid fuck. A great idea isn't going to come into your head. Now is the time you stop writing and never try again.

I don't know what you're good at, but I know you're bad at writing. Shut up.

It's not that bad. It's just more "thinking outside the box" style.

It's not that bad. It's just more "thinking outside the box" style.


If he intended to have crap punctuation, no grammar whatsoever, bad sentence structure and horrible spelling -

... artsy-outside-the-box stuffs suck, imo.

He's a grammar non-conformist. Leave him alone! =-O

The best way to get better at writing is to practice, not to quit completely. Keep writing, but to avoid pissy comments, wait until you've done something good and post it here. otherwise people are just going to say its awful.

leave him alone as you were saying with the non grammer conformists i have never seen STFU in a dictionary we all know what it means but it is not a word is it get of his case he was trying to make an interesting thread thats all

The thing is, he has done similar threads before here, posting "fanfiction", and he received similar reactions. He even officially asked for advice how to write a story, a piece of fanfiction. He got the answers, I think.
He chose to utterly ignore them, though, by opening this thread, presenting us a... story... that ignored everything we've given him advice about.
Ignoring basic things, like spelling. And like Cassie said: If he doesn't want honest feedback, he shouldn't post in here. He is just getting what he deserves. And if he wants more positive feedback, he ought to improve his writing. Using a dictionary to correct the more obvious mistakes could help already, at this current level. Heck, reading the thing through once after writing could help. And as long as he doesn't even do that, I have no respect for him as a writer.

l i have never seen STFU in a dictionary we all know what it means but it is not a word is it

Have you ever seen 'STFU' in a New York Times bestseller?

i disagreee, aeris wins or she should win. but actually i prefer they never did fight but if i have to aeris wins.

I always wanted this


Tifa and Aeris encounter each other.

Aeris: you!!! You took Cloud away from me!!!

Tifa: Whatever it was you who pushed him away.

Aeris: That's it *Whacks Tifa outside the head with her staff*

Tifa: OWWW

Tifa throws a punch at Aeris but aeris ducks and jabs her in the chest with her staff. Then Aeris jumps back and aims a thunder spell at Tifa but she somersaults out of the way.

Tifa: Loser hahaha!

Aeris: Grr.....

Tifa takes out a Red materia

Tifa: Tera Flare!!!

Bahamut ZERO comes out of nowhere and blasts Aeris hard. Aeri survives with a little blood stain on her shoulder.

Aeris: Ugh....

Tifa somersaults right in front of Aeris then jabs Aeris in the stomach and then kicks Aeris backwards 2 or 3 feet.

Aeris: Owie!

Aeris takes out a re materia also

Aeris: Gunge Lance!

Odin slashes Tifa giving her a major cut on her stomach. Before Tifa could react Aeris blasts her with a thunder materia.

Tifa:aaaaah

Aeris:Haha who is laughing now?

Tifa: Me Final Heathen!!!

Tifa knocks Aeris way far back. Both girls have major wounds.

Aeris/Tifa: huff....puff.....THUNDER FIRE ICE!!!

3 spells from two sides collide. Who will Survive?


That should be the crowd's decision go ahead vote i'll check who the winner is in 1 or 2 days
fight over a guy again sigh....

Wow, some of you are just so rude. If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say it at all. It's people like you who insult and take away the dreams of others. That can really affect a person, when you say, "You suck! You can't write, don't ever post in here again!" If all you can do is tell him how crappy it is, I'd like to see your writings. He did nothing wrong, just asked for an honest peice of advice. Whatever he wants to be is HIS decision. It's not yours. Don't ever tell people negative things like that.

then aeris used Knights of the Round Table..

TMA, everything you said there made me think less of you... and that's really saying something. I could pick your drivel apart one sentence at a time, but I'm too lazy right now to humiliate you properly.

I'll settle for saying that a real writer listens to criticism and learns from it. Nothing ever improves when the world is all wine and roses.

Wanna bet, bitch? Don't waste my time. And it looks like I'm the only one here encouraging him. I saw you, you even told him to stop wrighting, so please, SHUT THE FUCK UP.

I told him to stop "wrighting," did I? Where do you see that?

Oh, I get it now! You're talking out your ass!

o.o Lol! My ass is wrighting, that's right! How did you notice?

How about saying something that I could mock? It's boring when you make a fool of yourself without any help.

Once again you make no sense..I didn't understand that at all! RETARD LANGUAGE IZ HARD!11

Yet you mastered it quite well.

Once again you make no sense..I didn't understand that at all! RETARD LANGUAGE IZ HARD!11

But you seem to find it very easy..

Because I am smart, but I don't know about you guys..Does your IQ rival your shoe size?

How about saying something that I could mock? It's boring when you make a fool of yourself without any help.

How about saying something that I could mock? It's boring when you make a fool of yourself without any help.


Yet you mastered it quite well.

Buahahahahahaha :laugh:

STFU AERITH GAINSBOUROUGH

Aerith, I would have never expected something like that from you! ;)

Aerith, I would have never expected something like that from you! ;)

Why not? I just thought it was funny. And it is true! :laugh:

Yeah, same goes to you then, I assume. Oh and by the way....Power to the Clotis! There will be no AerithxCloud in ac!

Yeah, same goes to you then, I assume. Oh and by the way....Power to the Clotis! There will be no AerithxCloud in ac!

Well, who cares? I'm not going to die if there won't be a Cloud and Aeris in AC. It's only a game. And I'm not picking on others for having a different opinion.

Blah blah blah, yeah right! Lols.

I'd say if this is made up then your fav. chara survives. If it's made up by someone else then I'd say non survive for it's atrick question.

I'd say if this is made up then your fav. chara survives. If it's made up by someone else then I'd say non survive for it's atrick question.

that answer was almost as bad as the Original writing

Cloudmeister, I'm not going to insult, just give you a few pointers that might help. First, I would say reread, and correct any big mistakes in there. A few small mistakes you missed don't mean anything. Second, practice writing a few short stories using complete sentences and the best spelling you can do. I remember my first 'story' in second grade. It was half a page long, and skipped around without a real meaning. Real F material. After I practiced improving writing skill more, writing is my strongest subject in school. Third, make about three or four different versions of one story. Then reread them, fix errors, and pick your favorite.

That's the main things I do when writing, whether it's stories, rpgs, or fan fics. I would suggest that you try out a couple and see how they help.

cat fight