Here is the conclusion to my acclaimed FFXIII story!

(Please read Final Fantasy XIII story, villains and heroes first before you read this!)

This story is breif

The main charecters are on a rocket, heading towards Galan and Evick to stop the main cause of evil (Dogda).
They arrive on Evick to find that there is a war going on in Evick about the ruling of Evick's leader Etwan.
After stuff, they find Etwan and they follow her orders. But after a lot of stuff, the team finds out that she is being controlled by the infamous Soul Keeper.
Stuff happens and you finally verse the soul keeper but he instantly lose to him.
Etwan finaly regains controll of herself and tells the heroes that Dogda has moved from the emperor of Galan to a holy saint. Etwan devises a plan with the heroes to sneak into Galan's cermoney and listen into the ceremony.
At the ceremony, Dogda explains to the audeince that the heir to the throne was Astral but after his death, he appointed the position to Astrals brother, Viper.
Stuff happens and you discover the main plot of the story. Viper wants to collect the crystal power not to restore Galan's planet energy, but to fuse a deadly planet barrier around the universe.
Alot of important stuff happens (Ill get to this later) and you find Viper with the main crystal setting up the main barrier. You verse Viper and kill him but before he dies, he passes his power and revives a very powerfull man. This powerfull man lands on top of a tower called Vica Versa. There you verse the new saint Dogda and kill him, then you verse the arc angel Angelo del toro and he explains that the powerfull man ontop of the tower is the "Real" Astral. You are confused but continue on.... To the final Dimension!
Voices are heard in this dimension telling you of the history of Indego Dorma, (Ecreas) Dogda's father and how Astral arrived on Final Fantasy way before Galactica did. But when he arrived on the planet, Astral got a deadly virus which was attacking his heart. So he made a quick exit back to Galan where he died days after. You are confused. Who did you fight when you where on Final Fantasy? You continue in the final dimension where you meet with the real Astral and he explains that he witnessed a clonning experiment in the 7th final fantasy world and told Dogda this before he died. They clonned Astral and sent him to Final Fantasy in place of the real Astral. After stuff, you verse Astral and you beat him. After the fight Astral Transforms into Shinkuzen and you beat him. Then Astral summons the most powerfull summon ever, one of the Grandier Genisis, Zerra.Then Astral dies for good. Now you verse the final battle of FFXIII-2, Zerra.

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Awesome stuff! i noticed some Shining Force 2, and Landstalker elements in there (genesis). Have you ever played those games, or is it a coincodence? Either way im impressed about the story as a whole

Moving to Fiction and Poetry.

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Lol.

I don't think I've ever read something so bad. You have no story telling skill. There is no art, and little creativity to this.

I agree with MMM, this piece looks like it was written by someone with down syndrome, the concept isn't too bad but the way you've told it sucks

You are way to repetitious with your details:


They arrive on Evick to find that there is a war going on in Evick about the ruling of Evick's leader Etwan.

You don't have to name the damn region or planet or nation every time you speak of an event happening there. Same goes for characters, you only have to mention them by name if the event you're talking about involves a different one than the last one you wrote about.


After stuff, they find Etwan and they follow her orders. But after a lot of stuff, the team finds out that she is being controlled by the infamous Soul Keeper.
Stuff happens and you finally verse the soul keeper but he instantly lose to him.

It is at this point I conclude that this is obviously a joke, and none of us should ever consider any of your writing to be a serious attempt at something worth even a casual perusal.

Good day, sir.

I'v enever been a fan of fan-fiction. So... I give this one a 1.