Denny
03-03-2004, 06:11 PM
Red Dead Hotel Marsh by Denis Murphy

(this is goin to be violent,beware)



Well i stumbled into the hotel marsh at eight
Never too early never too late
I glanced to the front desk
Hoping for another

I quickly rang the bell
He looked in my eyes
Almost seeing his hell

From my godly jacket a pistol was spun
It caught the look in his eye and a gleam in the sun
I stuck it to his head
And he fell to his knees
He knew he would be dead

He prayed and prayed as the trigger gently moved
But istead of a hail mary
He gave a cough
Then i blew his head clean off

I spun around with no fear
And noticed one thing
There were no cheers
Only for me was this right
A lover of the night

I grabbed a girl that tried to run
And fired a shot through the back
And to me it was fun
With the item from the rack

As i tured around i saw mr.Brown
And with no thought i shot that motherfucker down

With laughter in my belly they ran like mice
And like a cat i pouncedfor the kill.

Father James held his book
Thinking i would give a fuck
But with a godless vengence i shot him down

I heard the sirens aproaching,closer and closer
I jumped on the counter and shouted down my name
Without a care and shame
Cause i knew i would take the blame

The blues ran in,guns blasting
I took them down one by one
Damn!this was fun

But with cheat shot in the chest i dropped,
My blood streaming and people shouting
It got darker and darker in that hotel
The hotel of Red Dead Marsh.


Its a bit dark but,hey,i like it.What about you guys.

Top Cat
03-07-2004, 06:21 PM
Is good. The violence adds to the imagery and I could kinda see into this guy's thinking- it just leaves you thinking abot this cold blooded killer dude.
I can't really say anything else...

Denny
03-07-2004, 06:22 PM
Thanks,at least someone replied,thank you